Fanfic commentary: 3Deep (Chpt 2) Acts 3 and 4

[wenchsenior]

Aaaaannd, commentary for the rest of chapter 2 of 3Deep...all praise to the Tea at the Ford crew!

Act Three

The man tapped out something on the screen with a tiny plastic implement. The manicured nails flashed in the bright morning sun and the dazzling paleness of cuffs shooting their impeccable length from the charcoal suit hurt his eyes.  This is a

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[db2305]

Thank you so much for this wonderful gift! Nothing is more exhilarating to a writer then to be picked apart and exegeted (is that a word?) like this...
Best feedback ever!

[wenchsenior]

Awwww. It's a pleasure to be grappling with such great material.

coupla bits

[macha3]

So The Immortal’s brand of ‘non-magic’ magic is a sort of thrall, it looks like, wherein EVERYONE is charmed and attracted to him. This would help explain his centuries of success at, well, everything, and the oddity of Darla’s giggly girlishness re: their tryst. This might explain Buffy’s hook-up with him, too, and the way we’ve seen her behave toward him so far.

even Giles, who detests him heartily, has to really work at it.{g}

First off, I love when Aurelian family history gets explored a bit in fic, since the Master’s court doesn’t, in fact, seem to reflect anything typical in terms of JossVerse vampire social dynamics. Second, Angel certainly seems to be working hard to convince himself he doesn’t want to be part of a team. He seems unaware of how much Spike’s presence is affecting his decision-making. If he doesn’t give a rat’s ass, why should he care whether Spike goes it alone? Yet, obviously, he does. The pull of family, despite all his protestations against connection?fits the Aurelian model, huh?{g} Spike's an irritant

Re: coupla bits

[wenchsenior]

Well the entire post isn't about the Library sequence, but about all the dream/prophecy sequences of the series so far...

I considered posting part of it today, but I'm gonna hold off a bit yet. I've been out of the country for over a month, back 2 weeks catching up on work, and am leaving for a different state for 3 weeks as of tomorrow.

I'll see what I can put together before Christmas.

On another topic, it'll be interesting if I am as captured by China Mieville's other works as I was by "Perdido". I have "The Scar" but haven't yet tackled it; it's the sort of book I will need to be in the proper mood for.

It's not often I think a sophomore writer really deserves the term "brilliant", but he does qualify, IMO. However, dude really needs a stronger editor. Of course, being an editor, I always think that :g:

China Mieville

[sylviavolk2000]

I know I've never read him. I honestly picked up one of his books in a bookstore once and opened it, and then my brain glazed over and went opaque. Fugue state. When I snapped out of it, I put the book back, and I've been okay ever since.