FIC: Deep Into That Darkness Peering (PG) for andmydog

[athena8]

Author: athena8
Recipient: andmydog
Title: Deep Into That Darkness Peering
Rating: PG
Characters/Pairing(s): Ken, OC
Summary: Based on the prompt, “Ken knows he's going mad. He just doesn't care.”
Warnings/Content: Psychosis, mentions of murder
Word Count: ~3,800
Author's Notes: The title comes from Edgar Allen Poe’s poem “The Raven.” The story is loosely based

Comments

[summerbutterfly]

This is intriguing and disturbing all at once. I like the two perspectives- the outside OC vs. Ken and how Ken, in many ways, really does sound like he's addicted to killing.

Thanks for the read!

[athena8]

Thanks! I was hoping for disturbing, but it was hard to tell if I was headed that way, lol.

[lady_ganesh]

Really, really well done. Poor Ken. Just so lost. I like the way you used the outsider perspective here to give it color.

[athena8]

Ken just isn't cut out to be a killer...lol. Thanks for your comment!

[lady_ganesh]

I still like my theory that he's also suffering from CBT, it would explain so much, okay.

[athena8]

Could be?? I'm not sure what that is, but I'm not very versed in psychology...

[andmydog]

Oh god, Kenken.

This is brilliant. I love the style you chose -- getting both Ken's POV and an outsider's perspective really makes the whole thing feel complete, you know?

And this bit, here. This is my favorite bit:

Dr.: Do you find yourself thinking about the mission much, afterward?

KH: Sometimes.

Dr.: Which part?

KH: … the smell. The heartbeat.

Dr.: The …?

KH: In my head, I mean. I hear it in my head.

Dr.: Your heartbeat?

KH: …

Dr.: Have you ever thought about taking a break from missions for a while?

KH: Why?

I love it. Thank you so much!

[athena8]

Yay! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. x) <3 The formatting did make me a little nervous...

[oracle_dreams]

Never doubt that little voice. The style makes this so much more impactful, the silence between words louder and clear than they may have been in a regular narrative. Very well done!

[athena8]

Thank you so much! I'm glad it worked. <3

[jedishampoo]

Oh, goodness, so good, so tense and disturbing (she says again). Like, I wanted Ken to realize something and when he sort of did it was heartbreaking. So well done with the format, too, which said a lot between the lines - which is really hard to do.