So Much Mine: Section Three

[wedspawn]

Title: So Much Mine
Author: wedspawn
Genre: Slash/Relationship
Pairing: JaeHo
Rating: Eventually NC-17
Jaeho Pimpage and Beta: Ranalore
Summary: Section Three.
The beginning of a shifting relationship. Hot Korean boys. Sex. Dancing and some angry words. Not necessarily in that order. Not necessarily in each section.

Section One; Section Two

Comments

[bishiebe]

This is so complex that it's making my heart wither! Poor them... I don't know who to pity more. Jaejoong for strugling with his want for Yunho or Yunho strugling to find out what exactly it is that he actually wants. Ah, this is why I love reading fictions once they're already this far ahead or done... don't have to wait for updates! x)

[wedspawn]

♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ ah, yes... this is very far done. :::grins::: ♥ i hope you enjoy it.

[julili]

"Swallowing hard, Yunho shivered, tasting the heaven in that small kiss of liquid and wondered at the confusion in his soul."

That is lyrical porn! *jizzes*

[wedspawn]

::::grins::: heh... thank you. smooches.

[yummy_dreams]

I really like how you are able to weave the surroundings of Seoul into your story... like this, "Far off in the distance, a rumble of traffic poured through Seoul’s streets, streams of people passing by the end of the alleyway, uncaring of the drama unfolding in the darkened niche of the club’s back door stoop.".

It's incredible how your style can cover such large scales... and then also collapse and highlight those important details... like the last sentence. "Swallowing hard, Yunho shivered, tasting the heaven in that small kiss of liquid and wondered at the confusion in his soul."

You have a way of showing rather than telling the nature Yunho and Jaejoong's relationship. It's really nice.

[wedspawn]

ah, when i wrote these... i wanted to use more than the english language... i wanted those nuances from the asian tongue. to telescope out and then focus inward on the small tiny spot above yunho's lip. i'd hoped to find that balance. i hope you enjoy it. and thank you for reading!

snookies

[aidana_astyanax]

Oh Yunho, be careful when driving!
And good bouncer who helped out and calmed Yunho down!
And Jae needs to eat more :(
Yunho, you need to realise that there's no harm in wanting ;)

[wedspawn]

jae does need to eat more. i think that's a common thing. he burns a lot of energy without taking enough in. :::nods:::

yunho is frightened. well, there are a lot of things that weigh on his mind. i tried to capture that.

[wedspawn]

::::hugs::: Heh. smooches and thank you!