Comments | we3sisters: Clair de Lune, Zacharias/Daphne, Rated R, Part 1/2

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Clair de Lune, Zacharias/Daphne, Rated R, Part 1/2

Feb 22, 2008 23:26

Another new ship arrives at we3sisters! Is there an epidemic around this place or what? Please welcome Zacharias Smith/Daphne Greengrass to the mix.

Clair de Lune
Pairing: Zacharias/Daphne
Summary: In war-torn England, one is captive and the other captor. Will dark things ensue?
Rating: Restricted. Adult themes and adult language.
Warning:Reader ( Read more... )

zacharias/daphne, hp, z/d, clair de lune, fallenwitch

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seegrim February 23 2008, 05:53:30 UTC

I knew it was you! Very nice.

fallenwitch February 23 2008, 06:22:02 UTC

How did you know it was me? I didn't even sign up?

7veilsphaedra February 23 2008, 06:53:02 UTC

A new fic from fallenwitch and, from all appearances, a good one. So much suspense. I'm full of anticipation for Part Two.

Is Daphne really a deatheater? Or just a young woman who is desperate enough to steal a wand off the only guard who shows her kindness? Is Zach being kind when he shows up again, and feeds and clothes her? Or is he laying a trap for her, knowing she may lead him to his enemies? That second wand ...

Your fics always leave me in this state, wondering and curious.

The interrogation scenes were very fraught, full of short, terse passages to illustrate a harsh, hellish existence.

The scenes where Zach brings light and music and provides an escape for Daphne beyond the physical boundaries of her body and her imprisonment were, by contrast, full of fine descriptions and melodic turns of phrasing.

What a wonderful read!

fallenwitch February 26 2008, 01:07:50 UTC

Thanks for your insights and your kind words, Phae. This isn't really my genre of choice (translation = god, I hope this doesn't sound butt stupid), but I enjoyed trying something different. I hope you like Part II.

black_alnair February 23 2008, 07:32:24 UTC

Oh look, it's Astoria's sister!! *waves* Welcome, welcome! All these new friends - how exciting!

I'm happy to see this here! I think moving on to a new pairing, a new style (re: verb tense), and a new process is always scary at first but thank you for sharing this with us. I like how it ends but it does leave me wanting more - hmm, I wonder what modifications you have made.

Also, *love* this line: "It masquerades as "Clair de Lune" by Claude Debussy, but it's really you." I think the underlying meaning of this line is embedded in the fic, in the characters and the writer herself!

peki February 23 2008, 09:13:46 UTC

Oh look, it's Astoria's sister!!

Lol! I love how I'm not the only one getting sidetracked by an unexpected new obsession :) I can't wait for you to have more time on your hands so you can give us more Astoria :)

fallenwitch February 26 2008, 01:13:12 UTC

I know. I laughed when I read it as well. "Oh look, it's Astoria's sister!! " So many new obsessions running rampant around here. What's next? Crossover fic? *eyes wide*

ryuugazaki February 23 2008, 09:52:57 UTC

This is so strange, because one of my good friends is enamored with both Mona and Boyd, and now her and fallenwitch have convinced me to use Mona as Astoria also XD But apparently the idea also stems from you!

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peki February 23 2008, 09:16:13 UTC

I'm glad you finally got to post this! Long overdue. I enjoyed being part of the discussion group that was allowed to preview it :) I'm also wondering how part II has turned out. Post soon!

fallenwitch February 26 2008, 01:23:40 UTC

Thanks, Peki. As I was telling BA, I think you'll recognize the changes which correlate to various viewpoints. *g* I tweaked and tweaked until I couldn't tweak anymore. Part II should be up soon.

seegrim February 23 2008, 20:23:30 UTC

How did I know it was you?

The writing style. You're economical with your words. It just reminded me of you. When I saw it on the exchange I wondered if someone hadn't been able to complete their assignment and you'd been called in...

fallenwitch February 26 2008, 01:30:00 UTC

Well, damn, I tried my hardest not to be recognized this time. I wrote in present tense, no swearing. I even hid the names of my betas. So much for that effort.

Yes, I was given around ten days from start to finish, and you know what a slow writer I am so this was a major dash for me.

seegrim February 26 2008, 02:46:36 UTC

I wrote in present tense, no swearing.

LOL.

Maybe most people couldn't tell? After having a writing lesson (or two) from you, I think I'm probably more aware than the average reader of your writing style. No passive phrases, words that pack a punch without being superfluous....

Ten days, though? Wow. I never would have guessed. Maybe you should try off the cuff more often? :)