You Gave Everything You Possibly Could -- LJ Idol (Exhibit B, Topic 1)

[waveform_delta]

“Janice! Janice? Janice, I’m home! What’s for dinner?” I wonder where the wife is as the door shuts behind me. Augh, what a day, what a day...it’s good to get these boots off my feet, I think they’re giving me a bunion. It’s hard to bend down and work the laces nowadays...always wondering what else I can do as long as I’m down there

Comments

[medleymisty]

I love the different viewpoints here and how they show how things can appear so differently to different people, and you really need to communicate and make sure your mind maps match.

[notodette]

Haven't read the other side yet, but I bet I already know what it says! I really like the way you did this. There's an excellent cadence here.

[halfshellvenus]

I love the characterization here-- very rich, and it feels utterly complete.

Interesting take on the prompt-- because there IS such a thing as being too pampered, and sometimes the overly doting person starts to feel resentful.

Off to read the other piece and see if that's the case!

[_rabidwombat_]

Awesome intersection! I am curious how you guys collaborated. Did one of you start off and then the other went from there or... ? Just curious from a writer's standpoint. Often times if one starts before the other it is obvious who went first, but with you guys, not so much. Well done!

I just went camping with my parents (74 and 69) last weekend and OMFG. This is a total snapshot of their life.

[fourzoas]

Very sweet--I liked the internal chatter of someone negotiating with themselves about a long-term relationship. Nicely done!