Free verse prose poem 3/100

[wanderinphoenix]

This is a piece I've been knocking around in my head for a while. I love riding trains, and I've always wondered what it would be like to work on them and what the people who did work the rails were actually like. Concrit always welcome

Comments

[ravgonfly]

This has a very interesting voice. You suck the reader directly into the narrator's mind with dialect and timed bits. I also enjoy your spacing. It adds to the rhythm of the piece without feeling like it is being chopped into bits.