Oh Sweet Jesus.

[wander_and_roam]

It's been too long since I've written anything, but I've got something now :-D

Wrote this a few days ago. Lemme know your thoughts, yeah?

Title: Next to Me
Author: Emilie
Pairing:DM/EW
Rating: PG
Summary: “Shadow boxin’ in my head again…”
Disclaimer: Don’t know ‘em, don’t own ‘em. Don’t sue. I’ve got nothing but student loans, and if you want

Comments

[c1tylov3]

‘Have mercy,’ Elijah thought
teehee. funny!
i like it. :)
good job.
<33

[bluemoonchild]

Much obliged :-) Thanks!

wow

[whyexactly]

I have to say that I think you have a very good grasp on emotions between two men who love each other very much, very well written and the world is a much more interesting and wonderfully loved filled place with you writing the script...If only life can imitate art.

Re: wow

[bluemoonchild]

::blush::

Thank you, ma'am. That means so much to me...I'm glad you liked it...

[msilverstar]

You took an important subject and treated it with respect and care. I hadn't thought much about his Catholic background before, but it deserves attention. I like some of your imagery very much.

Dom’s words slid quietly into his ears and around his brain.

Your work doesn't feel cliche at all, very new and fresh, nice.

[bluemoonchild]

I have a weird thing where I spend a lot of time thinking about how certain celebrities reconcile their religious upbringings and beliefs with having large gay fan bases. As a slash reader and writer, it somehow seemed natural that I would wonder how they would reconcile their beliefs with their own sexuality...if that makes sense.

Thank you for your feedback. I was worried that it would come off as cliched, and you telling me that it doesn't takes a huge weight off my shoulders. Thank you.

~Emilie

Re: wow

[bluemoonchild]

::jaw drops:: I don't think my writing has ever been considered art before...

Thank you for such wonderful words :-) I'm glad you liked the story!

[xixie]

I thought that this story was very well executed. I actually felt the sense of guilt and shame coming off of Elijah.

My favorite line:
"So, if you let me just have this one night, if you let me survive the rest of my life without the thought of eternal damnation, I promise…’ Elijah swallowed hard against a lump of dread . ‘I promise I will never do this again.’"

The bit "if you let me just have this one night." I remember making similar bargains with god when I was an adolescent. "If you just let me KNOW for tonight that Angelina Jolie and not Jonny Lee Miller is the reason I have the Hackers movie poster over my bed, I promise I'll go back to believing it's the boy I like." Seems stupid, but self-delusion is a fairly hard-core drug and just as self-destructive as crack.

I'd be interested in reading a follow-up. Does Elijah have any problems after admitting it to Dom and, more importantly, himself? And how does he handle telling everyone else?

[bluemoonchild]

You know, I hadn't considered writing a follow-up to this, but I will now...I'll have to think long and hard on it, but I'll definitely consider it.

Self-delusion is my drug of choice, too! Seriously, though. They say that quitting smoking is harder than quitting heroin, but I think quitting self-delusion would win in a head-to-head competition.

Thanks for your feedback!