3 Drabbles (firefly/serenity)

[walkwithheroes]

Title: Outside, Inside
Series: Firefly/Serenity
Theme no.: 019. Another grey day in the deep blue world
Character(s)/Pairing: River Tam and Jayne Cobb
Rating: G
Notes (if any): Follows Should Have

It's quite peaceful, really. Not responding to anyone or anything, just living inside one's head. Yes, River rather enjoys it.
Outside, the universe moves on

Comments

[charlichic]

These are beatuifuly written. You've really gotten inside Rivers mind. Well done!

[walkwithheroes]

Thank you for reading. I adore River, so it's always great to hear that I do her justice.

[charlichic]

I adore River aswell! :) And I think it takes a certain degree of ability to write for River, so your very talented! Not just any one can write from inside a 'crazy'(I hate that word) persons mind and make it make sense.

[walkwithheroes]

River's always been my favorite character, so I always try and take great care of her. She's complex, not crazy, but certainly not sane. Everything she says or does makes perfect sense inside her head, so I try and show that.

Again, thanks for reading.

[crazywriterchic]

That was great. Way to scare her out of a coma!

[walkwithheroes]

Thanks. It's a bit harsh, but after nearly six months...it was time.

[rawthorne]

There's something so unbeliveably soft about these drabbles. I think the fact that you emphasized on such etheral concepts like mind, imagination... even smell, made it all seem all the more dream-like, all the more fragile. And that helps when you think about how fragile River really is, in her head. What she's been through has left her broken and the rebuilding process is not easy.

On a personal level, I have to say I adored the way you described each of the crew members by smell. Especially since Inara and River's mother seem oddly alike to her. That rang very true to both River and Inara's characters.

I'm really taken with these...

[walkwithheroes]

Thanks so mucjh.

I wrote these and then posted them rather quickly last night. I think it took me about ten or fifteen minutes to write all three. So, I was mostly focusing on River and the characters around her.

What she's been through has left her broken and the rebuilding process is not easy.

That's very true. A lot of writers like to give River the 'quick fix' in post-Serenity stories...but, she's not 'fixed', she just no longer has the 'voices' of Miranda screaming in her head. I mean, the girl was broken, she had parts of her brain taken out...she won't be all sunshine and roses anytime soon.

Anyway, thanks for reading

[angel932]

Man, these are so intense! Very well done.

[walkwithheroes]

Thanks for reading!

[momin8r]

oh, lovely. time to wake up!! will there be an after she wakes up?........take care :D

[walkwithheroes]

I hope to write a little something, yes.