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[Oneshot] Jaemin

Aug 16, 2009 23:33

Title: ...haven't thought of one yet.
Pairing: Jaemin
Rating: R
A/N: I wrote this around Christmas time, forgot about it, and rediscovered it. The story has some interesting parts, but it feels too fast and bumpy at the moment. The transition from fighting to more loving is not convincing, imo, and I need to develop that part more. I'm also not ( Read more... )

#pairing:jaemin, !oneshot, status: unbetad

Comments 4

roselit August 17 2009, 05:50:05 UTC

hee, i remember reading this before. ♥ :D i like it a lot as it is right now.

azurehook August 18 2009, 13:56:23 UTC

:D thank you!! but yeah, I still feel like it's a little bit awkward~~

*GLOMPS* <3333

emda August 17 2009, 13:15:48 UTC

GOOD LORD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this is good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
the smut is really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
the only thing I think it could be work on is the figth, but overall is really good!!!!

azurehook August 18 2009, 13:57:08 UTC

thank you!!!!!!!!!!!! :D *GLOMPSNUGGLES*

yeah, I feel like I need to massage it more hahaha. XD

<333!