A Weird Spur of the Moment Short Story

[w_sims]

Comments

[drew_cricket]

Being an author of three or so short stories of similar topic, here comes the critique.
1) I love the way you've personalized the characters; Chastity the unchaste and Gabriel the way out of his comfort zone angel.
2) there are some typos. Missing/additional words and such.
3) Please keep going! I want MOAR!

[w_sims]

My only response to 2 is that creativity often hits me at an hour when my ability to accurately read what I've written evades me. I knew there'd be errors but they will have to wait until tomorrow to be found and destroyed :P

Otherwise, thanks! :)

[drew_cricket]

I know exactly what you mean! You're so excited about having an idea, that you hammer away at the keys, all proper grammar, spelling and punctuation lessons forgotten!

[kizzy_sims]

:O LOVE THIS. I always thought they'd end up together after a drunken stumble one night, but this has just taken the biscuit <3 Thank you for making my night!

[alexxschmidt]

I liked it! I wouldn't mind seeing some pictures, too. :)