Comments | vm_summer: Chapter 3: Masquerade

mutinousmuse in vm_summer

Chapter 3: Masquerade

Jun 24, 2006 00:45

Title: All Fall Down
Pairing / Character: Veronica/Logan, Keith
Rating: PG-13 to R
Words: Roughly 19,000
Summary: In Neptune, the brighter the summer sun, the deeper the shadows.
Spoilers / Warnings: Seasons 1 and 2 / Language and adult situations
Chapter 3: Masquerade
Author: mutinousmuse
Additional Characters: Lamb, Sacks
Rating: PG-13
Words: Roughly 6,000
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mutinousmuse, keith, sacks, lianne, veronica, all fall down, logan, lamb

Comments 69

sarah_p June 24 2006, 08:04:32 UTC

“What would Back-up think if he heard you talking like that?”

Hee. HEHEHEHEHE. Oh, man. Still the best EVER.

I really like all the complex emotion you managed to work in so subtlely, most notably with Logan concerning Aaron...you didn't say anything straight out, but there's such a fantastic tension and I LOVE IT.

Your Logan/Veronica are amazing together, but what really pulls this chapter together is the awesomeness of the Keith/Veronica dynamic. The underlying unease, the growing sense of mystery, the fact that VERONICA IS STARING AT A FREAKING DEAD BODY...all masterfully done.

Plus, you put Logan in leather. I thank you for that.

This is an amazing chapter, Musey! LOVE! :)

mutinousmuse June 24 2006, 08:07:17 UTC

Thank you so much! I actually haven't written much interaction between Keith and Veronica, other than a little ficlet thing I wrote about the acquisition of a certian pitbull for vmfanficutopia, so I'm glad it worked here! Thanks for all of your help during beta! *hugs*

syderia June 24 2006, 08:11:30 UTC

You put Logan in leather! You're awesome!

I liked it!

mutinousmuse June 24 2006, 08:15:01 UTC

Thanks! And yeah, leather and I have a long history together... Heh. Glad you liked it!

afrocurl June 24 2006, 08:17:26 UTC

This post is decidely early for this, but I'm not really going to complain.

Another wonderful chapter. The image of Little Miss Muffit reminded me of An Echoll Family Christmas, which is always nice.

The way you've all woven this myster together is wonderful. It's nice to get a little reveal each week (but also sad because I need instant gratification.

mutinousmuse June 24 2006, 08:46:47 UTC

Glad you liked it! And yeah, I'm a bit early, but we all decided to post Saturday, and hey - it's Saturday! Heh. Thanks for the feedback! :)

afrocurl June 24 2006, 16:10:11 UTC

It was Saturday--just earlier than I expected.

I forgot to mention earlier that I loved Logan in leather--it was a fitting costume, given your love interests.

Sid and Nancy was a wonderful idea, and so appropriate for these two.

mutinousmuse June 24 2006, 18:05:34 UTC

Glad you liked the costumes! And yeah, I'll take any excuse to put Logan in leather that I can get. :P

crazybohemian18 June 24 2006, 08:37:32 UTC

He looked up, and a face stared out at him from the mirror: old, tired, haggard. He blinked, and the face blinked back.
I loved this line a lot. And this whole chapter, really, but that's the one that struck me.

mutinousmuse June 24 2006, 08:48:04 UTC

Thanks so much! I loved that line too, so I'm glad you thought it worked well.

truemyth June 24 2006, 09:54:54 UTC

Veronica goes to the party hunting one cheating trophy wife, only to find another (and actually be a target her). The crazy shenanigans at the party are a great counterpoint to whatever strange badness is going on with Keith. I love your dialog and humorous descriptions, Musey. Great stuff. Welcome back to writing VM fic. Don't go away for so long next time, eh? *clings*

mutinousmuse June 24 2006, 17:55:13 UTC

Thanks so much! And it's been what, since March? Eeep! That is a long time. Oh, and points for using 'shenanigans' - I love that word! Heeeeee.