Comments | vm_santa: second installment for salingergurl! out of (i am pretty sure) 3

acinogan in vm_santa

second installment for salingergurl! out of (i am pretty sure) 3

Jan 19, 2009 03:04

hello,
salingergurl , your secret santa is back with more fic for you! i am trying like heck to get it finished, but this isn't the end...

Author: acinogan
Title: Out Of Harm's Way
Pairings/Characters: Piz/Veronica, eventual LoVe, also Keith, Mac, Heather Button, mentions of Wallace but no sightings yet
Word Count: 5795 this installment
Rating: um, PG-13? a few ( Read more... )

2008 gifts, salingergurl

Comments 19

love_is_epic January 20 2009, 04:09:40 UTC

The fic is awesome.... the bathroom scene... eh, not so much. J/K!! You KNOW how much I love this and especially the bathroom scene!! Them getting all hot and heavy next to the hand dryer just makes my blood pump faster... does that make me weird?? LOL.

Seriously, though; I love that Logan is the only one who can see through her facade, and I don't think it's just wishful thinking on his part. She truly isn't happy and I long for the day when she realizes that ONLY Logan can really make her that way. And of course I love me some clueless Piz : )

Keep going, girlie, cause people wanna read!!!! Great job!

acinogan January 21 2009, 07:29:23 UTC

yes, that does make you weird. :) but that's okay. of course it is not just L thinking wishfully! oh, the day when V realizes...will be in the next part. but only if you are nice to me. just kidding! it will be. (i hope i'm not giving anything away...) and poor little piz. i almost feel sorry for him, but not too much.

thanks for all the support!

vanessagalore January 20 2009, 06:14:13 UTC

There were a lot of great moments in this.

He slept the sound sleep of the innocent, ironic even while asleep.

This is such a great observation for Veronica to make; it's very true to her character and how she perceives him. It's also wistful and slightly sarcastic all at once.

People were starting to notice. She had to do better at being happy.This was great: Veronica is so private in her angst, and she hates pity more than almost anything. I also really love that you're exploring how she feels about what she did to her dad. You're conveying a lot without hitting us over the head with it ( ... )

acinogan January 21 2009, 07:56:08 UTC

this was a really awesome comment, i just wanted to say :) thanks! i'm glad you liked it.

this fic is so much more cerebral than any other VM fic i've written, so i'm happy you are enjoying all of the thinky-do that's going on. and the bathroom scene. that probably goes without saying, except now i've said it. more coming up soon! thanks for reading and commenting!

salingergurl January 22 2009, 01:15:06 UTC

The last section of part 10 was insightful and beautiful, and this line:
With her eyes closed, she felt his hands on either side of her face and it felt like home, like the bad parts of the past three years had never happened, just the parts where they found each other. She felt it and she couldn't leave.

brought happiness to my soul. In fact, all the bathroom stuff was PERFECT. Oh, bathroom LoVe meetings. Who doesn't love them?

Glad Heather's okay! Can't wait for the ending! Thanks again!

acinogan January 22 2009, 20:25:10 UTC

yay! SO glad you liked - one more chunk and that's it, and that is about half done, so the end is near. finally :)