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eloiselovelace February 6 2007, 18:54:11 UTC
You are an absolute dear for obliging my need for foreign language fic and saving me from the vicissitudes of fanfiction.net. (To be fair, there's good stuff there, but also a lot of badfic.)

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eloiselovelace February 6 2007, 18:54:51 UTC
Ooops, premature send. So, thank you! I had a lot of fun with this - thanks for prodding me to write one, too, and then saying such undeservedly nice things about it!

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softlyforgotten February 8 2007, 05:23:07 UTC
Mannnn. Just beautiful, thank you so very much; I especially love this paragraph: The fibres of the fruit hung on tightly to the stone, for dear life, and she had to shred the flesh off, as it shivered and swooned like anemone swaying beneath the sea, seen from above by a quiet, 8 year old girl. Like liquid rubies, like a kiss, lipstick, a handgrip of ‘don’t go’, or a pool of rage; the sun sank into the fruit.

The anemone image is perfect. ♥!

And, clever you! Much better at French than me! <3

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visoka February 8 2007, 07:15:08 UTC
XDDD Thankyou! I'm so glad you liked it - I realised halfway through that it's sort of similar to the tangerine drabble you did me, but by then I was too into it to bother changing it. Consider it reciprocity :P

Hehe, I actually did rip apart a plum a few days ago, and I kept on thinking how I'd write it...I'm such a geek.

Oh, the French...am gonna have to provide a more correct version of that...

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eriathwen_bob February 8 2007, 21:29:05 UTC
Hey, here via Hogwarts Today and eloiselovelace's post on foreign language fics. I love the ideas in your little ficlet (particularly Pansy's eyes)... but... may I correct your French a little?

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visoka February 9 2007, 04:51:52 UTC
:D Yes! Please! I would be forever grateful to you and your superior knowledge of French ♥

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eriathwen_bob February 9 2007, 08:19:34 UTC
Ginny Weasly n'aime pas Pansy Parkinson. Pansy est riche, et elle aime parler avec les gens qui sont riches, et qui n'aiment pas Ginny, n'aiment pas les Muggles, et qui adorent Voldemort.

Cependent, Ginny adore pour Pansy elle regarde, ?tout? niege et blanche et rose, avec les yeux qui n'aiment pas Ginny, mais qui adorent les cheveux rouges de Ginny, qui semblent comme beaucoup des fraises.

The main problems were not agreeing adjectives (Pansy est riche) and using -ons (first person plural, we) for -ent (third person plural, they).

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visoka February 9 2007, 08:25:25 UTC
Vous etes tres, tres fantastique! Merci beaucoup!

And I really to get on to those lessons...

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