Reasons Unknown, Part 4
Title: Reasons Unknown, Part 4 (AKA, Limo Porn That Once Was).
Fandom: Heroes
Pairing: Plaude
Rating: PG13
Disclaimer: Not mine. At all.
A/N: Haha! Finally! And...there's one more part to come, but at least this is...something. That doesn't actually have any porn in it. Sorry.
Part 1, Part 2, Part 3
( Porn Free! )
Fandom: Heroes
Pairing: Plaude
Rating: PG13
Disclaimer: Not mine. At all.
A/N: Haha! Finally! And...there's one more part to come, but at least this is...something. That doesn't actually have any porn in it. Sorry.
Part 1, Part 2, Part 3
( Porn Free! )
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Now... to the fic:
This is a little bit ominous and a whole lot sappy and I love it.
lovers, committed, something special and tender and…he really could kill the boy at this moment.
Ah, Claude. Fickle, fickle, man.
Oddly enough, my favorite scene was this, though:
“I’ll get you a photo.”
“Really?” the boy brightens considerably,
There's something... painful in Peter's optimism.
Great work.
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This is a little bit ominous and a whole lot sappy and I love it.
Heh. I'm glad you did, I was a bit worried about the tone shifts...
Ah, Claude. Fickle, fickle, man.
He's not fickle! He's...conflicted!
There's something... painful in Peter's optimism.
For everyone; there's no way that's ending well.
Thanks!
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they were going to break her, put her back together, turn her, into whatever it is he was supposed to be.
Whatever it is he was supposed to be, and wasn’t.
They’d lost him, too. Just a matter of time till someone figured it out.
Wonderfully subtle- you'd never know what was going on unless you knew what was going on. It's like being in on a secret, as tragic and frightening as this one is.
It had to be an act, the blushing, awkward bit; had to be, too much attention paid to him and too much sharpness in the lineage to be anything but.
Oh, that killed me. Because you know Claude just keeps telling himself that, but can't make himself believe it.
He looks at him for a moment, searches those soft eyes and knows he couldn’t be responsible for breaking this boy, knows he couldn’t see him know better just yet.Again! Ow, my heart- but in such a good way ( ... )
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Wonderfully subtle- you'd never know what was going on unless you knew what was going on. It's like being in on a secret, as tragic and frightening as this one is.
Heh. I'm glad it's wonderfully subtle and not completely confusing. Subtlety is hard to get right...
Oh, that killed me. Because you know Claude just keeps telling himself that, but can't make himself believe it.
That's just about Claude's entire story right here. Telling himself stuff that he can't make himself believe.
Again! Ow, my heart- but in such a good way!
So that remains a talent of mine...good to know.
I'm really glad you liked it. And your comment, again, makes me smile a ridiculous amount, so thank you.
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I'm glad it's wonderfully subtle and not completely confusing.
Maybe just a touch, in the first sentence or two of that section. But after that, it's definitely clear, if not explicit. Again, as long as you already know what's going on, which anyone reading this ought to.
That's just about Claude's entire story right here. Telling himself stuff that he can't make himself believe.
*sniff* Poor baby...
So that remains a talent of mine...good to know.
I agree, considering the massive heart trauma to come...
It's easy to like things when they're awesome. ^^
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That's good; I always worry about those things, the ones that make so much sense in my own head and then...might not in anyone elses.
I know. And it's only going to get worse. I'm such a cruel soul.
Jeez, don't remind me. I'll hate myself over it.
Well yes, I'd imagine it would be.
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You're writing Peter as a teenager really well here, because he does have that tendency as an adult to be naive and young, but there is still a clear distinction here between 18-year-old Peter and 26-year-old Peter. It's almost heartbreaking how innocent and eager he seems here, because there is no way this is going to end well.
Also, poor conflicted Claude. He knows he shouldn't let Peter anywhere near him, but he just can't seem to help himself.
I hope you're feeling better today!
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It's almost heartbreaking how innocent and eager he seems here, because there is no way this is going to end well
Ohhh, no it's really not. It never is. *sigh* Why can't we ever have happy endings?
Also, poor conflicted Claude. He knows he shouldn't let Peter anywhere near him, but he just can't seem to help himself.
No, he can't. And it...admittedly makes me feel a little conflicted myself. And a little pervy, and not in a good way. *laughs* Oh, the age difference. Usually doesn't get to me, but...
Thank you! I'm...not so much. But a little better.
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There's always the fluff for happy endings. But anything that takes place at this point in the timeline has no chance of ending well without being a complete AU. Not that I think you should do that with this story, but an AU of that sort has always piqued my interest.
I think it's because Peter's so young here. Not only in age, but there is just the sense that he has no idea what he is getting himself into with this version of Claude. It's not entirely Claude's fault, but there is a real power imbalance here.
A little better is good. And tomorrow you can sleep in... hopefully.
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No, I do have a plan...like...thing in regards to where it's going, and a complete AU would be a bit of a cop-out but...I'll admit, the temptation is kind of killing me.
Yeah. That's completely, exactly it. I mean, at least he's not technically jailbait but...the power imbalance is a bit irksome. Which is making it incredibly tricky to imagine writing porn for it again. I don't think I could.
Heh. Well, because there's apparently a hurricane coming...I've been instructed to go home to my parents house early. So, probably have to get up early. And also work tomorrow night. Gah.
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Ah, that. I did wonder, at the time ;)
Yeah, I'm with lotus0kid - gorgeous train-wreck. Last part nao plz? Yes?
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Hee. Well, I had hoped to make people wonder a bit...I'm glad it wasn't obvious, though.
Yeah, I'm with lotus0kid - gorgeous train-wreck. Last part nao plz? Yes?
Easy for you to say! I have trouble writing the last part of anything; not even because it'll end badly (well, it's not like it's going to end well, but no one dies), just because...I don't know. I don't want to ruin it; the first part of the whole thing is just about one of my favorite Plaude pieces I've ever written, and I want the last part to match up with it.
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