Novel: "Touch" chapter 16

Nov 17, 2013 21:01

[Trigger warning for physical abuse]

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vettecat November 18 2013, 19:11:53 UTC
I'm getting confused about when Trudy can see through Amy's eyes, and when Amy can speak clearly. I thought they had to be in physical contact? But recently it's seemed like they only need to be in proximity.

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violetcheetah November 19 2013, 02:10:20 UTC
It's my intention that they be in contact, but usually that's just a hand or even a couple of fingers touching a shoulder or arm. Where in this chapter or previously has it seemed that they haven't been touching?

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vettecat November 19 2013, 03:03:49 UTC
Reading it over more carefully I see that they are but I missed it on first read. Except for the flopping over on the bed - it's hard to visualize how they're staying in contact there.

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violetcheetah November 19 2013, 15:19:44 UTC
Hmm, perhaps I should rework it so that there -is- a moment when Amy breaks contact and then re-establishes it with, say, her hand on Trudy's ankle. I kinda like that plan.

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