Second line is AWESOME. I literally "BWAHAHAHAHA'd" and i'm sure my flatmates heard it.
I loved the images at the end-- the partially fried chicken, Jack popping up, the insinuation that Norrmander is skulking under the desk, waiting to strike again.
There's some spelling and punctuation issues that need to be fixed. Do you have a grammar beta? 'Cause getting one would be methinks a good investment.
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Second line is AWESOME. I literally "BWAHAHAHAHA'd" and i'm sure my flatmates heard it.
I loved the images at the end-- the partially fried chicken, Jack popping up, the insinuation that Norrmander is skulking under the desk, waiting to strike again.
There's some spelling and punctuation issues that need to be fixed. Do you have a grammar beta? 'Cause getting one would be methinks a good investment.
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