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vie_dangerouse

"More Than a Feeling"

Dec 27, 2010 10:49

“More Than a Feeling”

Prompt: Someone (inadvertently or not, up to you) puts the malocchio on Dean. Symptoms may include: illness (sneezing! I mean, what?), feeling of unease, uncontrollable crying, dizziness, headaches, indigestion, bad luck, dehydration, death. Obviously not death, please! Whichever other ones are up to you, or invent your own - I ( Read more... )

[genre: gen], gratuitous stephen king reference, pardon me i'm kind of a stud, supernatural, sam likes being snarky too, fanfiction, cough, i eat angst for breakfast, fever, sick!dean

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borgmama1of5 December 27 2010, 17:26:59 UTC

Liked the gritty feel of this.

vie_dangerouse December 31 2010, 03:55:40 UTC

Thank you! It's been a while since I've dabbled in Season 3, and it was really fun. :)

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vie_dangerouse December 31 2010, 03:57:49 UTC

LOL, I definitely thought of you when I wrote that part. And the mal de ojo was just plain fun to write, since I got to use all my super special Spanish medical skillz. Okay, not really, but it WAS nice to get to write about something I learned about in school. :)

So glad you liked this!

water_fowl182 December 27 2010, 20:15:05 UTC

This was really, really well done, concept and execution. Fun, and true to slant for the most part, whereas the closing paragraphs added that extra flavor of acute sudden poignancy, that is an undercurrent through all of season 3.

On the lighter note, given the sheer number of ladies it pleases to look at Dean, the hapless guy could've been very well cursed for a couple of hundred lifetimes in advance *g*

vie_dangerouse December 31 2010, 04:08:32 UTC

Oooh, thank you! That is a fabulous compliment.

And YES- if such were true, I'm sure we all would've cursed those boys into eternity. :D

i_speak_tongue December 27 2010, 21:00:57 UTC

A real pleasure to read. Love your banter. And that tinge of angst was right up my alley. Awesome.

vie_dangerouse December 31 2010, 06:17:48 UTC

Thank you so much!

rince1wind December 27 2010, 21:49:09 UTC

Liked it and was sorry it didn't go on for a while longer. The only small thing was, more than one "bitch...jerk" makes them sound like they really don't like each other much, I think. Loved "...so's communism." :-)

vie_dangerouse December 31 2010, 06:24:39 UTC

I'm glad you liked this! :) I put so many "bitch/jerks" in this one because I thought that at this point in time, the boys don't really know how to act around each other- Dean's just sold his soul and Sam's just been resurrected- so they go back to something comfortable, which is being kind of mean. Or else I've just written so much angst lately that all the leftover snark got poured into this story!