4. The Axe Forgets; The Tree Remembers

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Monday, August 12th-7:38 p.m.

1,913 words. Approximate reading time: 9 minutes, 33 seconds.

Rhian stepped into his bedroom and softly shut the door behind him, then walked over to his bed and promptly collapsed onto it. He had told his parents that he was tired from his first day and wanted to get to bed early, and, while that was certainly true,

Comments

[furzicle]

Well done. And, of course, the ending is appropriately creepy.

[viagra]

Thank you! :) I was hoping to go a little lighter this week but the prompt said "maybe go a little dark" lol

[adoptedwriter]

Wowie! Dystopian school and home! We’ll set up. You could add scenes and chapters and turn this into a very cool teen / YA read!

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Thank you! :)

[mollywheezy]

Eighth grade is hard enough without state sanctioned abuse! I felt really sorry for Rhian. The last line made me absolutely shudder. Excellently written!

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Thank you so much! :)

[engarian]

Oooh, very thought-provoking. Rather frightening.

- Erulisse (one L)

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Thank you! :)

[drippedonpaper]

Wow, that would be absolutely terrible (the punishment). They are trying to break the poor guy down :(

This is a seriously messed up society, but I can see it becoming a popular series, a little like an updated "Giver." Are you going to continue it? I truly think it would catch on!

Keep writing!

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Thank you! All of my entries this season so far (and hopefully until we're done) take place in the same universe, although the time span I'm planning ranges about 25 years. This one takes place a few months before my entry for "What Really Matters." I'm wondering if I should explore these characters more or stick with one-offs. Who knows what the future holds? :)