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Drabble: Settling Debts

Apr 27, 2007 15:02

Title: Settling Debts (because the title-generating portion of my brain is not working right now)
Author: versifico
Rating: G
A/N: Double drabble (200 words). Written partly in response to the prompt "settling debts" from the table at
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challenge, fic

Comments 14

erinya April 27 2007, 20:33:15 UTC

This is wonderful!

For dreams that suited her better than reality, because Jack is not so formidable now with hollowed cheeks and shadowed eyes.

This made me so sad for Jack...and she feels even worse now that she sees what she's done to him--that he's not the invulnerable Captain Jack. The reality vs. the dream of him; the reality is that he's just a man, and capable of being hurt.

How strange it is to care so much that they now hold nothing at all.

Ouch. Love that, though. Very poignant. Glad I could help spark some drabblage!

versifico April 27 2007, 20:45:26 UTC

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! I absolutely cannot wait for this movie. It's hard to write speculation fic when AWE reality looms so near ahead.

piratemistress April 27 2007, 21:54:13 UTC

Beautiful! I loved the lines erinya mentioned, too. Very nice.

versifico April 28 2007, 04:34:43 UTC

Thank you! I've also enjoyed the drabbles you've posted...am actually off now to finally read the new fic you posted today *bounces off*

salr323 April 27 2007, 23:08:35 UTC

I love this. I simply cannot wait to see how they handle their meeting again in the movie, but something like this would be perfect!

versifico April 28 2007, 04:36:23 UTC

Me too!! I am fairly unspoiled (trailers & official promotional material only), but what I have seen has me so excited for the movie.
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

cmgacrux April 27 2007, 23:31:28 UTC

Beautiful. I'm very glad you've written more.

versifico April 28 2007, 04:36:59 UTC

Thanks so much! It's good to be writing again. I plan to do lots of it this weekend.

sirdrakesheir April 28 2007, 00:42:38 UTC

Short and sweet and beautiful, especially this line:

"This land is strange; the shifting sands and flat air set her skin crawling. She longs for home, of feeling sure of the world and her place within it."

versifico April 28 2007, 04:38:44 UTC

Thank you! I imagine that Lizzie (like many of us) long for the familiar comforts of home when things in our lives get dark and twisty (a little Mer. Grey love there *g*)