Comments | veronicamarsfic: Fic: Pain (Logan/Lilly, Veronica/Logan, Logan POV) NC-17

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Fic: Pain (Logan/Lilly, Veronica/Logan, Logan POV) NC-17

Jun 03, 2005 06:40

Title: Pain 1/1
Author: Sophia_bee
Pairing/Character: L/L, V/L, Logan POV
Word Count: 1588
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Logan has learned that pain and pleasure are inextricably linked together.
Spoilers/Warnings:1x18, language, references to sex, adult themes

Author Note: Back to darkness and angst. Comments welcome and appreciated. :)

( It was like the ending of a bad movie: the sting of iodine against the cuts across his back; tragic tears wetting Lynn’s cheeks as she gently cleaned his wounds between sips of gin and tonic )

lilly, sophia_bee, nc-17, veronica, logan

Comments 44

noelia_g June 3 2005, 07:01:05 UTC

Oh my... So brilliant, so powerfull. I have no idea how you do it, but your words come together so perfectly...

Thank you!

sophia_bee June 3 2005, 13:40:12 UTC

Thank you!

_jems_ June 3 2005, 07:12:54 UTC

That was wonderfully dark and moody, yet hopeful. Not an easy thing to pull off. Thank you!

Kissing her was different thank kissing Lilly.
I think an extra K snuck in after "than".

sophia_bee June 3 2005, 13:36:38 UTC

fixed - thank you. I was tired this morning when I posted.

bogiesbacall June 3 2005, 07:18:09 UTC

Gorgeous. You really have a talent for capturing these characters so vividly and creating such a dark, and truthful image of them and their situations. Wonderful work.

sophia_bee June 3 2005, 13:41:08 UTC

Grazie! The dark edge is what I like about VM, which is there because the characters are interesting and complex.

inigo June 3 2005, 07:37:04 UTC

I felt like I was reading the Veronica Mars writers' bible. Excellent characterisation of Logan and beautifully and sympathetically written. I would love you to take it further, with the impact of the last four episodes.

One minor thing. I was not sure if this was intended or a typo but it was the only point I stumbled in my reading:

Logan would remember as he sat on his bed that night, staring into his dark room, picturing his face as she opened the door, that Veronica had lost her mother as well.

Should it be "picturing her face"?

sophia_bee June 3 2005, 13:39:27 UTC

typo! And it's been fixed.

Thanks for your fantastic comments. I feel a huge amount of sympathy for the character of Logan - outside V., he's the one who has experienced the most hell.

maybedarkpink June 3 2005, 08:01:32 UTC

Wow, this is really gorgeous. You capture the Veronica/Logan relationship, and Logan's character so well. Just... gah. Amazing writing!

sophia_bee June 3 2005, 13:42:07 UTC

Thanks!