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Red Elephant (5 of 11)

Jul 13, 2010 08:22

Title: Red Elephant
Author: verdeasterie
Pairing: Rachel/Quinn
Length: 4447
Rating: NC-17, for language used
Spoilers: Season 1
Disclaimer: I do not own Glee and/or any of its characters.
Summary: How Quinn Fabray falls in love with Rachel Berry and vice versa.
Notes: So, I'm not really happy with how this played out, but I'll leave it ( Read more... )

length: 1000+, rating: nc-17, pairing: rachel/quinn

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Re: ! verdeasterie July 14 2010, 06:57:12 UTC

Hey thanks! :) I'm really psyched that you love it. I wasn't sure about this one so... it's awesome that you think it is. And not to be tacky but I'll steal Rachel's line: ‘He really is an idiot.’ Thanks again for reading. :)

jacketweather July 14 2010, 07:16:19 UTC

Yay bonding over Eternal Sunshine. It's probably my favorite "serious" film since my other favorite movies are things like Indiana Jones and Star Wars. But I love Eternal Sunshine. Gondry and Kaufman really outdid themselves with that one.

verdeasterie July 14 2010, 08:35:00 UTC

Yes, it's one of my all-time favorite movies. The cinematography was just utterly exquisite. Star Wars and Indiana Jones are indeed classics. :)

jacketweather July 14 2010, 20:06:58 UTC

Eternal Sunshine is just stunning. I love Gondry's flair for visuals but this is my favorite film of his because it also has a solid story to back it up. Science of Sleep and Be Kind Rewind were fun to watch, but their stories weren't as consistent or engaging. I'm itching to see his take on The Green Hornet.

verdeasterie July 15 2010, 08:27:20 UTC

I absolutely agree with you. I believe it helps that the story revolved on something a lot of people could relate to. I haven't really seen Science of Sleep but I did see Be Kind Rewind. Thanks for that heads up on The Green Hornet. I didn't realize he was working on that. (Although I'm not quite a Green Hornet fan myself, but with Gondry on the helm, that will be quite interesting.)

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verdeasterie July 14 2010, 11:32:07 UTC

Thank you. That honestly meant a lot, more than you could ever imagine. :) Yes, I do believe we've all established that fact about Finn. I was a bit apprehensive in including that anecdote on Aurora and Helene. I'm really delighted that it elicited the reaction that I'd been aiming for. It's endearingly nice how you adored that story. Again, those compliments and comments have always been lovely.

Thanks. Please feel free to babble anytime you want. :)

anonymous July 15 2010, 01:43:39 UTC

You're right! Finn is not only an idiot but an annoying human being as well. I just can't stand him! Even in the show.. GAH.
Anyway, I loved this chapter mostly because of their (Quinn and Rachel) interactions. :D You totally owned it when it came to getting those two together around something they could relate ;D Their exchanges are fantastic and I'm looking forward next chapter.

Big thank you for the update :)

Dessa.

verdeasterie July 15 2010, 08:37:35 UTC

I'm glad I'm not the only one who couldn't stand that guy. (Though Cory might be a sweetheart, for all we know.)
It's really nice of you to say that. I do have good news and unfortunately, some bad news. The good news is that the next update will have a lot more interaction from the two of them (naturally). The bad news is that I might not be able to update until the end of the week. It's a bit crazy in this part of the world where I currently am. But I will try to post the update as best I can. Thank you for reading and commenting. Hope I don't disappoint come next chapter. :)

anonymous July 15 2010, 14:29:52 UTC

Very true. Cory is a sweetheart indeed, as well as Jonathan :) But I just can't stand Finn and Jesse.. I don't know, it comes naturally I guess :D

So, I'm actually very pleased with the good news. The bad ones though, I will tell you do not need to worry. :) Take your time and keep going with this amazing piece or work ^^ Lenghty chapters might compensate our waiting you know? :P *hint* But I'll surely love anything you come up with.

:)

Dessa.

verdeasterie July 16 2010, 06:33:40 UTC

That's really nice and sweet of you to say. I'll see what I can do about that lengthy chapter. :) (I'd have to filter out distractions in my life first.)

And yes, Jon Groff is indeed a sweetheart. (I absolutely adore him in that Spring Awakening Benefit with Lea. The one when they did a duet of I'll be home for Christmas. And that True Colors Concert when they sang Lucky.)

Again, thank you Dessa. :)

mjacton July 15 2010, 15:33:06 UTC

Well, there's progress.

This is still a little dense. Maybe you should try not to try to use synonyms for common words so much. Instead of who would longingly observe from a tangible distance, just write that he watched longingly from a distance. Also, maybe not so many adverbs. Be more subtle.

I hope you take this as constructive criticism. I have these tendencies, too. I recognize them better when I'm reading than when I'm writing.

verdeasterie July 16 2010, 06:21:43 UTC

Of course. I really appreciate those comments and everything is taken as constructive criticisms. Thank you for taking the time to point those out. I'll take them into consideration. I suppose that's just the way I write at times.

About the subtle part, I thought that I already was. :) Again, thank you for reading and commenting.

mjacton July 16 2010, 15:01:18 UTC

Overall, you are being subtle, but sometimes the words you use can be more subtle. Anyway, keep writing! Sometimes, it just seems like one minute you're trying to use slang or vernacular (there is a place for big words) and the next you're trying to use more obscure language. It seems like it comes out of nowhere sometimes, unnaturally.