the art of leaving and saying goodbyeelderwittyJuly 16 2012, 01:37:27 UTC
Much as I hate the thought of Danny cheating, I couldn't stop reading. It's so very plausible that they would meet and crash into each other's lives, strewing debris everywhere. Poor Steve - so repressed after a lifetime in the Navy. (Thank god that shit is done now!) And poor Danny - he finally decides to do the right thing, even if it hurts him (and Steve).
A few typos:
In Chapter 3, you have reign instead of rein In Chapters 9, 10, 11, & 12, you have mean time instead of meantime. There are two in Chapter 11.
ETA: Forgot to say, technically it should be On to next part, or it sounds like you're telling folks to climb onboard. :grin:
I love this story and I want to hug and kiss those who prodded you into completing it. And then hug and kiss you.
So many things. I spent a good portion of time so conflicted, because Danny, stop cheating on your wife ... but it's STEVE, and I hate that and love it at the same time. The layers of Steve's brokenness were so beautifully painted (he's not gay because he can't be, not because he isn't), and I adooooored Danny's "Fuck them." about the Navy, because fuck them with a damned fork, for sure.
I feel like I should say more, but instead I figure I'll start re-reading instead.
That conflict was part of the attraction of writing it, for me. I wanted to see what would happen and if I could do it without Danny turning out as a complete asshole. Thankfully, I seem to have succeeded. As for Steve, well. Given the chance to break him, I couldn't resist. (And yes, fuck them with a fork, I hear you.)
I went through quite a bit of emotions while reading this. but from beginning to end, I loved it and I'm adding it to mems!
I didn't necessarily have a problem with Danny, but I was somehow expecting Rachel to also be cheating or for Rachel to find out sooner that Danny had been cheating.
I also figured that Steve wasn't going to be in the clear as far as his relationship went with Danny. I want to know who basically ratted him out because that's some BS
Didn't see the drama with Danny's first partner coming at all. But I could tell he had some sort of issues with his girlfriend.
Recommending this to everyone because they need to read it!
I will read it again because the whole time I was skipping parts because Danny cheating on Rachel really bothered me, well, cheating in general does that to me. But the way you counted the whole story, so real, the way you built up their personality, specially Steve's holy shit, woman! It was so fucking painful to read how the Navy treated Steve and I know how homophobia works, after all, I had my share of suffering but it was nothing like that. I just spent a great time thinking about how extremely painful it was to have to choose between hiding a part of yourself or giving up on something that means so much, like you career. Fuck, this is an outstanding work.
Also, I should mention that I, too, was expecting Rachel to be cheating on Danny but I'm so glad you didn't write her like this.
Characterisation was key for me, in writing this fic, because I didn't want to pretend anything about the events in the story was "easy" in any way. I wanted Rachel to be as lovely as she is on screen, and Danny to be scummy for cheating on her, and Steve to be conflicted and fucked up, regardless of what I'd put them through. Glad that came through for you.
And the Navy, yeah, there was a point while writing this that I knew that DADT had to be the way it happened, but it didn't make it any easier and when I discovered he would then actually have to work out his service for a while longer... that was tough to write.
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A few typos:
In Chapter 3, you have reign instead of rein
In Chapters 9, 10, 11, & 12, you have mean time instead of meantime. There are two in Chapter 11.
ETA: Forgot to say, technically it should be On to next part, or it sounds like you're telling folks to climb onboard. :grin:
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So many things. I spent a good portion of time so conflicted, because Danny, stop cheating on your wife ... but it's STEVE, and I hate that and love it at the same time. The layers of Steve's brokenness were so beautifully painted (he's not gay because he can't be, not because he isn't), and I adooooored Danny's "Fuck them." about the Navy, because fuck them with a damned fork, for sure.
I feel like I should say more, but instead I figure I'll start re-reading instead.
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That conflict was part of the attraction of writing it, for me. I wanted to see what would happen and if I could do it without Danny turning out as a complete asshole. Thankfully, I seem to have succeeded. As for Steve, well. Given the chance to break him, I couldn't resist. (And yes, fuck them with a fork, I hear you.)
Hope you enjoy it on the reread, too!
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I didn't necessarily have a problem with Danny, but I was somehow expecting Rachel to also be cheating or for Rachel to find out sooner that Danny had been cheating.
I also figured that Steve wasn't going to be in the clear as far as his relationship went with Danny. I want to know who basically ratted him out because that's some BS
Didn't see the drama with Danny's first partner coming at all. But I could tell he had some sort of issues with his girlfriend.
Recommending this to everyone because they need to read it!
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Also, I should mention that I, too, was expecting Rachel to be cheating on Danny but I'm so glad you didn't write her like this.
Just, wow. Congratulations! Really well done. :D
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And the Navy, yeah, there was a point while writing this that I knew that DADT had to be the way it happened, but it didn't make it any easier and when I discovered he would then actually have to work out his service for a while longer... that was tough to write.
Thank you very, very much!
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