Untitled Ficlet

[veracity]

This is an original story I wrote, well, not even a story so much as a ficlet. I just wanted to put it up since it's pretty much...me, like who I am.

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[goddess09807]

This was really, really good. I love this line:

The world has a dulled hue around the outer limits and bleeding into the center, rose-colored sunglasses long since broken.

it just provides such a good visual. The rest of the piece is fantastic as well, but I'm in love with that line.

[veracity]

*grins* Thank you. I had to substitute "edge" with "outer limits" and realized it could be expanded a bit to make a better visual. I pretty much only write visuals (I suck at dialogue), so I'm glad it came across. My friend who saw it first liked the same line the most. That's pretty much, as a whole. The entire piece. I hadn't meant to share it, just writing for my benefit since I haven't done original in a long time (I don't think ever in second person) so it was a nice 5 minute exercise.