Can't Make You Love Me [3/?]

[vemela]

Title: Can't Make You Love Me
Genre: Drama/romance
Characters: Alfred Jones & Arthur Kirkland
Pairing(s): USUK
Rating: M
Warnings: AU, strong language, use of human names, sexual situations
Summary: Arthur's just doing his job. Then some idiot decides he wants to see him properly.
Summary of this chapter: Alfred's first real sexual encounter with

Comments

[vemela]

Thank you!

I'm glad that's initially your response to it. Although sex can be really heated and erotic, from personal experience, it tends to be much more about discovering each other and generally just having a laugh heh. So, when I write smut, I always try to keep a certain level of awkwardness and yeah. So I'm glad you think it's more genuine this way!

I'm still working out their backgrounds, but all things will be revealed in a few chapters ;)

Thanks so much for reading and giving me feedback!

[j_sasunaru_c]

I really like how things are going for them - it's not a smooth ride,and especially that it's Alfred's first time with someone, and it's Arthur's first time having someone really attracted to him. I like to see more of how they handle the new deal they agreed on, and ahh! I will really wait for your update! Thank you so much!

[vemela]

Precisely! Thank you so much for reading, I'll try to update as soon as I can!

[warriorseadra]

First of all, thank you for this lovely update! I enjoy the story so far, and you haven't bore me so don't feel worried about boring me or anything ok? ouo

As for critique - I'm not the best at constructively criticising smut, but I can definitely feel for the adorkable naivete of Alfred, and during Alfred's moments of uncertainty and fear I wanted to squeeze him tight and call him my baby ;u;

I wonder about Arthur's past now, why he has become the way he is toward affection, why he chose to be where he is now (besides financial problems of course)

I really hope Alfred and Arthur can be happy together eventually, but at the same time, I'm glad you didn't automatically make them mutually fall in love happily at first sight, because it gives your story somewhere to build from. I like where it's going so far, so keep up the good work!

[vemela]

I'm really glad you're enjoying it! Thank you for the reassurance haha <3

Yay for inexperienced Alfred! He is a baby, let's not kid ourselves~

I'm afraid that things will get a lot worse before they get better between the pair of them, buuuuut I'm not totally sure how I'm going to end this yet. Definitely a WIP.

Thank you so much for the positive feedback! I'll update as soon as I can!