Pawns Chapter 22

May 30, 2005 22:18

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zalia May 31 2005, 22:58:40 UTC
Yay for evil!Al!!

Another great chapter ^^ I'm really glad I managed to work up the courage to finally read it (I was so sure it would be a total angst fest, but it has a lovely mix of angst and humour ^^).

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kojirokat June 1 2005, 03:13:11 UTC
I finally decided to read this out of immense curiosity. I simply love it now! Your Roy is just so awesome, as is the whole story! Evil!Al! OMG!

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kojirokat June 1 2005, 03:13:59 UTC
BTW, I hope you don't mind that I'm adding you to my fl. Just want to keep up with this and your other writings.

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kiwi_kero June 1 2005, 03:29:50 UTC
*tackles* I love you, you plot-making genius! Lol, you have totally caught my interest. *feels bad for putting off reading it as long she did, but is now pwned by it* I SO can't wait for more!

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asidian July 28 2005, 20:09:55 UTC
Holy -hell-. Holy hell, it's working... so why do I feel this impending sense of -doom-?

Excellently done- their plans are sparklingly brilliant. Your plot is kicking my ass. *carries on reading*

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velvet_mace July 28 2005, 20:41:40 UTC
So Roy's plan meets with your approval.

Now you see what it is... He realized Midnight was having him work on a slavery array that would be put on HIM and Roy said to himself. Well, really isn't this like the fox gaurding the hen house? How stupid are these people? How far can I push this? So he brings Al and Winry on board since he needs outside supplies and help.

Now personally, I thought everyone would be saying back at like chapter 7 or 8, gee, boy the army is stupid having Roy work on this -- but no one did. LOL.

You have no idea how rewarding it was to find out that my audience DIDN'T see it coming until it happened. I was SO afraid everyone would think this a stupid plot.

Sigh. Reading your comments is really rewarding.

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asidian July 28 2005, 21:51:50 UTC
I think it didn't even occur to me because when they started testing it was on rats, and it never so much as crossed my mind that they'd try it on a person. Well, the military, yes- but not Roy, and -certainly- never Al.

The work that went into convincing him was appreciated- and necessary for the characterization to carry through, I think. You did a great job with it. ^_^

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