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velvet_mace

Kitty Al! part 3

Oct 07, 2007 19:00

TITLE: Savior
RATING: NC-17 oh howdy
PAIRING: Roy/Al/Ed
GENRE: Angst
WARNINGS: Dark and Evil. Alternate Timeline Animeverse: Bondage, non-con,incest, toys, slavery, Chimera!Al, Bastard!Roy. Ed is 21, Al is 20 but looks 15, Roy would be 44 if anyone cares.
WORDCOUNT: 10,000
A/N: This is a sequel to A Perfect Companion NC-17 Roy/Al and Sacrifice ( Read more... )

non-con, kitty-al cycle, angst, fma: al, fma, roy, fma: ed, rated: nc-17, fic

Comments 37

orion117 October 8 2007, 13:16:10 UTC

Oh, man, this was powerful. Watching Ed being sucked into this scenario, to the point where he's now Al's sex slave, was chilling. And as much as Al is grateful to his brother for acquiescing to his needs, he also is enjoying being the dominant one in their relationship for a change.

When Ed helpfully concealed all evidence of his departure, I knew he was in trouble. Yes, Ed, you're stealthy. Heh.

Hawkeye and Havoc's take on the changes in Roy were interesting, as was Ed's interpretation of the changes. So close and yet so far.

The test tube of Essence de Roy was the ultimate squick and a great way to end it. For some reason, that was creepier to me than Roy coming on Ed's face, perhaps because it was so calculated.

velvet_mace October 8 2007, 15:39:13 UTC

Hee hee, Roy is a very practical person. Actually the coming on Ed's face was pretty damn calculated as well, in that it was something he planned to do if Ed ever showed up. But the test tube keeps it "fresh" longer.

Covering his tracks made perfect sense at the time. Roy approves!

Personally, I never really got why Roy was busted down to Corporal in the movie -- in fact, I never got a lot of what happened in the movie -- so having him mildly braindamaged as result of being shot in the face seemed as good an explination as any. Of course, his real personality change was due to the Gate dicking around with his brains.

Poor Ed, willing to do anything for his brother, including being turned into a sex toy.

orion117 October 8 2007, 16:27:50 UTC

Actually the coming on Ed's face was pretty damn calculated as well, in that it was something he planned to do if Ed ever showed up.

That did come through in your story very well, that Roy came on him as part of his "experiment" to see if he could transfer some of Al's need onto Ed. I probably should have said that the test tube was more chilling because it was more routine. Ed has grudgingly learned to accept it as necessary.

Personally, I never really got why Roy was busted down to Corporal in the movie -- in fact, I never got a lot of what happened in the movie -- so having him mildly braindamaged as result of being shot in the face seemed as good an explination as any.Yes, it does. That was the biggest missing piece of the movie for me (I enjoyed it, but it seemed as if they tried to cram three hours of movie into half that). How did the guy who said, "Life is beautiful because it is imperfect," turn into Emo!Roy? I could fanwank that he didn't know Ed was missing for good at the time he said that, but it wasn't very ( ... )

esteltinuviel October 8 2007, 15:41:22 UTC

Gorgeous and wrong on oh so many levels, but that's what makes it so fun to read. Another amazing story--I'm happy to see you've written more!

velvet_mace October 8 2007, 18:46:06 UTC

Oh yes. This is pure horror without the gore!

numi_nami October 8 2007, 18:04:29 UTC

THAT. THAT IS SRSLY SOME WEIRD FIC, RIGHT THERE.

But it's all good, yes? Your style of writing keeps me riveted, although part of my mind tells me 'Stop reading nao, this is just...no.'.

velvet_mace October 8 2007, 18:45:15 UTC

Heh, while I like the fact that I can get people who are squicked to keep reading, do I need stronger warnings?

numi_nami October 8 2007, 19:10:03 UTC

Nah. Your warnings are fine as they are.
Goodness, but I do love squick, yes? ♥

velvet_mace October 8 2007, 21:21:45 UTC

Me too!

urplesquirrel October 8 2007, 18:20:51 UTC

*insert noise of extreme creeped out, disturbed, fascinated, and disgusted here*

Your mindfuck scares me so much, Vel. SO. FUCKING. MUCH. Why do you have to write these things so amazingly well?

velvet_mace October 8 2007, 18:47:13 UTC

Ah yes, squick squick squick!

Oh you love it when I ream your mind.

urplesquirrel October 9 2007, 15:00:32 UTC

I must. I keep reading your fics!

hikaru_9 October 9 2007, 01:21:11 UTC

Wow... that is just so creepy and disturbing. And i have to say, it's so good! Really, it's nice to see fic from you again, i was missing your brand of dark!fic.