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Fic: Odyssey of the Mind, part 3/4

Aug 04, 2008 09:37

Title: Odyssey of the Mind
Author: Veldeia
Fandom: Iron Man movieverse
Pairings: Tony/Jarvis, Tony/Pepper
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I own no one and nothing, except for a messed up mind that likes playing with other people's characters and universes.
Summary: Like countless times before, Tony woke up in the white room, in his white bed, exhausted, ( Read more... )

iron man, odyssey of the mind, fic

Comments 5

tonpep1 August 4 2008, 07:30:10 UTC

Have no fear, you are writing Tony just fine and I am glad you posted this. I am still so intrigued by this whole story. Your Jarvis is just dead on. He is so very human that I keep forgetting that he really isn't. I loved the flashback and how that helped Tony remember things. Also the part where you had Tony think maybe he should just have sex with Jarvis instead of knowing what happened, was just so Tony. Even with the darkness of this story, that part had me laughing. I can't wait for more.

veldeia August 4 2008, 07:43:06 UTC

Thank you. So very glad to hear that. :)

Only one more chapter left, so it'll be all revealed then...

tonpep1 August 4 2008, 07:48:28 UTC

Gah! I have been so into the story I forgot there is only one chapter left. I am excited to read it but sorry to see it end. I really enjoy your writing and hope this won't be the last story you share.

ladylahatiel August 4 2008, 18:32:13 UTC

Your Jarvis makes me cry. He's so vulnerable, he's trying so hard to do this the right way, to fix Tony and make him better, it's obvious how much he loves him...god, I LOVE this story, it is so amazing. I can't believe the next part is the final part. Once it's posted I'm going to have to go through and read the whole thing from beginning to end.

I sincerely hope you have more Tony and Jarvis ideas, you write them so well. And Tony, out of character? Even in this confused, damaged state Tony's personality is so strong he nearly put off finding out what had happened because there was the possibility of sex. I'd call that pretty much spot-on.

veldeia August 4 2008, 22:03:07 UTC

Thank you, once again! I'm now convinced that at least 2 people think my Tony is OK and IC at least in this story. :P

I've actually written a tag-sort-of-thing for this fic which I'll probably post too, but it isn't exactly part 5 or anything, and it's from Pepper's point of view. On the other hand, I DO have some, or at least one other Jarvis-centric fic idea that I'm currently working on, a sequel to Third Wheel - in which Jarvis is even angstier and more sad than in this one. I seem to have this tendency to make him a very unhappy little AI, poor thing :( Though, there may always be a happy end... :)