Comments | veldeia: Fic: Technobiosis, chapter 1/6

veldeia

Fic: Technobiosis, chapter 1/6

Jan 11, 2009 15:30

Okay. This is the first chapter of the story I was going on about in the previous post. The story's finished now, except for proofreading & polishing. I'll probably post the rest of it during the next week or so. So far, I'm only posting this here at my lj and at ff.net - I'll consider putting this up at starkindustries when it's done, if you friendly flist ( Read more... )

bioses, iron man, fic

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jeymien January 11 2009, 15:21:12 UTC

Oh Happy!

:)

veldeia January 11 2009, 15:36:21 UTC

'twas the first-ever thing I wrote from his point of view, too. :)

captain_elessar January 11 2009, 16:22:42 UTC

Awwwww Happy! Poor guy, that's sad. This is definitely a good beginning. Empty hospitals are eerie (I work in one, not an empty one), they always remind me of the Godfather. I've only seen ours empty once. I can't wait for more. :D

veldeia January 11 2009, 19:20:23 UTC

Hmm, that makes me feel a bit self-conscious about the fact that this whole fic is set in the hospital (an unnamed, generic, fictional hospital, though), I mean, I hope I haven't taken too many artistic liberties to make suspension of disbelief impossible for you. :o And yes, eerie and creepy was what this first chap was supposed to be. I'm not sure I managed to make the murder attempt part nearly as creepy as I would've wanted to, but meh, at least I did my best...

captain_elessar January 11 2009, 19:49:42 UTC

You know it's fiction. It's not that big of a deal. There are usually a lot of people around patient rooms but at night it is a little quieter, as much as it's going to get. But like I said, fiction. Don't worry about it, it's a good story I'm anxious for it to continue. :D

veldeia January 11 2009, 20:09:32 UTC

Yes, of course, but there's a limit when even fiction gets too unrealistic to work... I think it's a lot easier to do online research on medical facts than facts about how hospitals work etc, and since I've only just visited a real hospital a few times, most of my ideas come from TV shows and fic and so on. Ah, anyway. I guess, I'm worrying too much, as usual. :P

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agilebrit January 11 2009, 23:40:05 UTC

AUGH.

Excellent Happy POV, we don't see that often enough. Can't wait for an update. :)

veldeia January 12 2009, 19:19:20 UTC

And it gets worse! ;)

I'll probably be updating a chapter a day, so it'll be all up pretty soon.

magicamethyst80 January 12 2009, 19:13:45 UTC

Wow, excellently done fanfic. I actually wasn't expecting, well an action scene, which was brilliantly done. Please continue, I can't wait for more.

veldeia January 12 2009, 19:18:14 UTC

Hee, thanks. I'm afraid there won't be much more of that in the future, though. :P

magicamethyst80 January 12 2009, 19:39:02 UTC

That is fine, I'm here for the h/c, don't mind action, but do want to know what is going on with Tony. Is it his condition due solely to the arc reactor being stolen, or was there something else going on beforehand? As what was said in the movie, the "smelly goo," can't be a good thing! Keeping the entire condition from any cardiologist wasn't the wisest move, but I understood why it was done.

Very curious to read the third chapter!

amonitrate January 18 2009, 16:48:54 UTC

uh oh. that was very exciting. What a nightmare.