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[vegablack62]

An owl swooped into the Leaky Cauldron, dropped a letter and a package where Neville was sitting at the bar and landed, knocking over Neville’s drink with his outstretched wings. Hannah quickly wiped up the spill, amused at how messes followed Neville even when he wasn’t the cause. Neville gave her a rueful look. She shrugged and smiled back.

Comments

[ceirdwenfc]

You write that so well. The part where the girl is waving and Hannah is reading the letter - I can really feel Hannah's jealousy. That's so well done. I would have told the audience that Hannah was jealous, and you showed it so well.
Thanks for sharing.

[vegablack62]

Thank you! That was a great compliment. I wanted to convey that Hannah was a little jealous of the girls Neville travels with. Neville and Hannah aren't dating yet in this story, but they are both interested in each other and she definitely wonders about the women he works with. This piece amused me. For some reason the very beginning drove me nuts.

[clionona]

OMGOSH!!!
I'm so sorry that I'm just now getting around to reading this, but it was worth the wait!!!
The emotions running through this are wonderful. Everything kind of flowing under the surface. Hannah's slight jealousy was very well done... just a hint, you know?

And the ending had me grinning from ear to ear. That's just so Neville! A testament to how well you know this character.

Loved it!!!

♥!

*dashes off to next story*

[vegablack62]

Thank you for reading this, on top of everything going on in your life. I love the last line too. It makes me smile when I read it myself.