Oh, the improvement is AMAZING! That line She had to reach for the anger she should be feeling. made my day and completely hooked me. Amazing, amazing job considering the original version - how much more grabbing, stylized this one is. Thank you - the birthday is two days away *g*
I'm pleased that you like it--and yeah, it's really much improved. I feel bad about posting the other, but I needed the comments to shake things up a bit.
And I'll pretend it's a slightly late birthday present, because this is great. Sydney's voice is urgent, compelling, and in-character. Really nice work. Now what's next? *g*
*bounces* Could I possibly be more excited for the beginning of the season? I think not.
Oh yes! Consider it a present for you! I'm so glad that you like it.
Could I possibly be more excited for the beginning of the season? I think not.
I'm dying. Dying, I tell you. I have this feeling that the first few episodes are going to make me want to write, and write, and write. I can almost feel all the words brimming, and I just need something to hang them on.
I'm dying. Dying, I tell you. I have this feeling that the first few episodes are going to make me want to write, and write, and write. I can almost feel all the words brimming, and I just need something to hang them on.
Yes, *exactly*. I do have some niggling worries that it'll end up being all about the S/V/O triangle, but there's too much other material to play with-- that won't happen.
I almost feel like the people who are actually psyched for S3 need their own club or icons along the lines of those Buffy Fans: No apologies icons. I don't remember being this marginalized before. *g*
Really? I find that it's my normal state. But yes, it's a bit odd to have to read through posts and posts about the new Mrs. Vaughn's hair color (who cares?) to get to anything interesting. And by interesting, I mean having to do with Sark, because there's practically nothing about Jack or Irina or anyone else out there.
(And I can tell that the bashing of the new wife is going to get worse than distasteful very very soon.)
However, you should pay attention to the anti-Mrs.-Vaughn wailing, because it has the potential to develop into quite the fandom rift, and might be interesting in a clinical sense.
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And I'm hooked.
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Glad to have caught you.
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Sydney's restlessness is much better captured, and I still love that Sark recognizes Sydney in spite of the missing time.
I think I caught a typo-- you have a "role," on Sark's tray, and I think that should be "roll."
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I'm pleased that you like it--and yeah, it's really much improved. I feel bad about posting the other, but I needed the comments to shake things up a bit.
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*bounces* Could I possibly be more excited for the beginning of the season? I think not.
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Could I possibly be more excited for the beginning of the season? I think not.
I'm dying. Dying, I tell you. I have this feeling that the first few episodes are going to make me want to write, and write, and write. I can almost feel all the words brimming, and I just need something to hang them on.
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Yes, *exactly*. I do have some niggling worries that it'll end up being all about the S/V/O triangle, but there's too much other material to play with-- that won't happen.
I almost feel like the people who are actually psyched for S3 need their own club or icons along the lines of those Buffy Fans: No apologies icons. I don't remember being this marginalized before. *g*
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Really? I find that it's my normal state. But yes, it's a bit odd to have to read through posts and posts about the new Mrs. Vaughn's hair color (who cares?) to get to anything interesting. And by interesting, I mean having to do with Sark, because there's practically nothing about Jack or Irina or anyone else out there.
(And I can tell that the bashing of the new wife is going to get worse than distasteful very very soon.)
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"...so I said, that's not how dialectic works, you cow, and she..."
Heeheehee!
And about any worries that S3 will be too much S/V/O, I have only this mantra to offer:
Every. Freakin'. Ep.
Sark. Get it on, boy.
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Oh, yeah. Say it with me--baby is back.
However, you should pay attention to the anti-Mrs.-Vaughn wailing, because it has the potential to develop into quite the fandom rift, and might be interesting in a clinical sense.
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