SPN Fic: The Little Moments, S/D Weecest 1362

[vampirelady]

Title: The Little Moments
Pairing: Sam/Dean
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Established weecest relationship. Sam is 13 in this fic and there are graphic sexual situations between the boys.
Disclaimer: Not mine, all Kripke's and the CW's.
Word Count: 1,362 semi-beta'd by omnipredation.
Feedback of any sort is adored, especially if it's constructive!

Summary: Dean

Comments

[omnipredation]

...You know, I hate to admit that this was a turn-on, but it was. The only crit I have is that you're missing a few commas here and there. If you want me to cite the minor sentences here and there that are missing that kind of silly punctuation, I will, but otherwise, this is ready to be presented to the world of Wincest.

Hot. So hot it's embarassing that I enjoyed it. Dammit, when do we get season three?!! LoL

<3

[vampirelady]

Season 3 started last week.

And I would love to know where those missing commas are. I'm usually pretty good with getting commas in where they should be, but apparently not as good as I thought. ;)

And your thinking this is hot just made my day. I wasn't sure how other people would take to it, considering I have little to no experience and I'm kinda just going off all the porn I read to figure out how I want them to be.

[omnipredation]

Trust me, it's hawt. I'll post later with specifics as to where I think the missing commas are. Since I'm comma-crazy myself and am often corrected for it, I'm kinda weirded out by finding places where I think commas should be... especially since you've used the semicolon effectively!

PRAISE. Praise, praise, praise. If anyone bitches to you about this when you publish on AFN or anywhere else, refer them to me and I'll punish them thoroughly. This is a thoroughly believable story.

Anyway, must catch torrent first EP of s3...specific comma-citations and stuff to come later. :)

Much love. Please keep writing passionate and, most important, RELEVANT wincest for the rest of us to read.

[vampirelady]

:D I've already started a second part to follow after this fic. This part took me about a week to get down, rewrote the beginning nearly 7 times with 7 different scenarios before settling on this.

Thanks for the praise! It means a lot coming from you!

And now I'm off to class. Stupid Geology lab. I'd rather be writing or reading fic. :P

[trueshellz]

this was awesome
me loves
couldnt see any major mistakes
but maybe becaue i was trying not to fall on the floor from the hotness!
=D

[vampirelady]

:D *beams* Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and found it hot!

*pads the floor around you just in case* ;)

[deanshot]

I was looking just incase there was mistakes really I was but it was just too hot, higher brain functions seemed to stop and all I could do was soak up the hotness of your story.

[vampirelady]

Yea! Thank you! Losing higher brain functions is definitely a compliment! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and thanks for looking for mistakes! :D

[quarterwhore]

Um. FHJKgflkghlkhgzkdg. It's so hot, but in a quiet, intimate way. Which is the best way, in my opinion.

[vampirelady]

:D Incoherency is a good thing.

I never really thought of it as quiet hot... I kinda like that description, though.

Thanks!

[quarterwhore]

Yes, it's a very good thing!

What I mean is that it doesn't try too hard, you know? It just is hot.

[vampirelady]

Ah. Makes sense! The porn was easier to get out than the beginning. I think I changed that second paragraph about 7 times before settling. Crazy brain not wanting to make up its mind and creating 7 different scenarios.

[vampirelady]

I may have a second part to this in the works, we'll see how it wants to come along! :D

I'm glad you liked it!

Yea for Wee!cest! :D