Five times Daniel tried to save Charlotte (and one time he did)

[valhalla37]

Title: Five times Daniel tried to save Charlotte (and one time he did)
Characters/Pairings: Daniel/Charlotte
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Five times Daniel fails. One time he doesn't. AU.
Spoilers/Warnings: Up to 5x14; character death, potentially triggery stuff, dark themes.
Disclaimer: Not mine.
A/N: Written for the Five Acts meme, and hitlikehammers's request of angst

Comments

[mustaza]

¡¡¡DIOS MÍO!!!

Uh... THIS. This is just perfection. I was really expecting something angsty from you (though it's not even for my own Five Acts). I started to cry from the very beginning (and that's an effect I'm seriously getting used to). What I love about your fics (besides the angsty-and-glorious thing) is the incredible amount of vocabulary (I need it to survive in this media, lol).

My favorite part was the second one --- Lil' Charlotte dying really broke my 16-year-old heart.

(Now I want to write a Five Acts for you --- but don't expect a master piece like this one)

[valhalla37]

Eeeeee, thank you so much! I always hesitate to post my ... stranger/darker stuff, so I'm so glad you enjoyed!

Awwww, I felt so badly "killing" baby!Charlotte, but that whole episode I just felt like I was on the edge of my seat waiting for something to happen to her!

(I commented on your other post on this already, but no pressure on the Five Acts fic ... if you do, though, I won't be upset! ;P)

[squeakyboots]

OMG: Wonderful. Seriously. I think my favorites were I and III. III, because I think I actually got chills when Daniel was reading the newspaper. I loved the way you wrote that whole last paragraph.

The details in the first one were what really got me, though, particularly the idea of Charlotte having held on to her gun (of all things), Daniel's almost-kiss, and this, my favorite of all: "(she'd never say it, don't leave, but he sees it, that thin, dark shadow of terror that passes through her gaze)." Love this. Not only for the great language in which you've expressed it, but also in the way that it mutually characterizes both of them through the absence of action--what is not done. And for Charlotte and Daniel, that makes a whole lot of sense.

[valhalla37]

Wow, thank you so, so much! I was a little bit disappointed at the beginning of S6 that it wasn't some kind of reset (and even more later when the whole Jughead/time travel plot didn't seem to matter at all, but aaaaanyway), so I was intrigued by the idea of what would have happened if it worked but really didn't.

Awww, I'm so glad you liked the Charlotte characterization there, because I do think that's the main thing she'd care about, something like where the weapons are. ;P And this -- in the way that it mutually characterizes both of them through the absence of action--what is not done. And for Charlotte and Daniel, that makes a whole lot of sense -- that is pretty much the perfect summation of what they are, eh?

[hitlikehammers]

I am just, I... WOW. This whole piece is exquisite, and it seems to do the entirety a disservice to pick out any particular part, because it’s all just stunningly, wonderfully brilliant, but this line here:

...working and going back to his dingy apartment when he's not in the lab, drinking at the campus pub when things get really bad and losing days to the bottom of a whiskey bottle (MacCutcheon's; if nothing else Dharma pays well) when they're worse.

PHENOMENAL. Section i was almost painful to finish, because it was so... bereft, the way he left her, and then section ii? Just... so devastating, of course, but it’s also so in line with the show, and how things happened on the Island. And then the whole of section iii? Heartbreakingly gorgeous. And my word, but section iv? Just, just... that’s art right there, the aching, reaching, wrenching unfolding you’ve conveyed. Absolutely breathtaking. Section iv is chilling and stark and it hurts, and then the end... my goodness, but the end You’re brilliant. You’re basically just absolutely

[valhalla37]

Awwwww, thank you so, so much, hun! I'm so pleased that you liked this, since it kind of went off the rails from your prompt, so I was a little bit uncertain.

And yay, especially excited that you liked the fourth part, since that was by far the weirdest and one I was most hesitant about, haha, though almost the one I could see most, based on the Daniel of mid-S5.

Anyway, I'm so, so happy you enjoyed -- thank you SO MUCH for the phenomenal, amazing feedback! :D

[franza]

number IV is my favourite, naughty Daniel, heheheh. great fic. so vivid

[valhalla37]

Hahaha, thanks so much! He turned out a little bit of a creeper in that one, eh? ;D

[franza]

Yeah, but he's the only guy that can be creepy and adorable all rolled into one

[soda_and_capes]

Oh my god, this is just perfect. I can't even--I think iv is my favorite, but they're all phenomenal. I like that they get increasingly hopeful, like maybe they'll work, but no. And then the last one, aaaaaaaaaah. Seriously heart-wrenching, and in the end it made me feel so much better about their ending on the show.

[valhalla37]

Oh wow, thank you so, so much! I'm so pleased you noticed that kind of gradual build, since it was purposeful but I thought maybe not evident enough, so yay! Glad that it actually ended up flowing a little after all. ;D

And thank you so much for the wonderful feedback!