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vail_kagami

Aliens

Jun 13, 2009 04:13

Rating: G
Prompt: #042 - Alien
Claim: The Time War
Table: Here
Spoilers: None
Characters: The Doctor (9)
Summary: Gallifrey was gone.

(Gallifrey is gone.)

The Doctor drifted through space in his TARDIS, alone. Lying on the floor to stare up at the ceiling, feeling the aftershocks of regeneration for days. He didn’t want company. It would have been ( Read more... )

medium: story, fandom: doctor who, table: time war, doctor who era: ninth doctor

Comments 10

rose_cat June 13 2009, 06:56:15 UTC

Oh, that hurts. And the last line is a killer. (Or a "KEL," as karaokegal puts it.)

It wasn’t his planet. It wasn’t his people. For the first time in centuries he knew that he didn’t belong there...and they all looked far too much like Them.

I never thought of it that way. I wonder if makes it worse when, post-Time War, humans do something that makes him angry? Certainly it would make an experience like the one in Midnight all the more devastating -- a greater betrayal -- when his "favorite species" has become the closest thing to a people that he has left.

vail_kagami June 13 2009, 18:43:33 UTC

You know, I very nearly had the last line (or a variation thereof) be the entire story. But then I thought that would be pushing it and came up with a little more.

Thanks for reading! I never considered Midnight that way - it's an interesting thought.

dariclone June 13 2009, 22:33:19 UTC

Wow. I loved the writing style, very poetic. And the Doctor's melancholy rang true to character. The last line felt so well.

vail_kagami June 14 2009, 18:57:06 UTC

Thank you!

teastainedbird June 16 2009, 17:16:22 UTC

This hurt so nicely. Newly regenerated Nine always produce such good angst and add to that your exceptional talent to write emotions, that's a winning equation.

That last line was just perfect.

vail_kagami June 16 2009, 17:49:52 UTC

Why, thank you! Your praise means a lot to me.

nightrider101 June 19 2009, 23:03:48 UTC

Now that's what I'm talking about!

I missed the sucker punch in the gut feeling your stories often leave me with.

And he despaired in the face of the knowledge that there no longer was any place where he wasn’t an alien.

It's painful, heartbreaking, and so very true. Great job! This is a fabulous addition to your Time War table!

vail_kagami June 19 2009, 23:27:03 UTC

Thanks for the praise! The Doctor gives depressing authors a lot to work with.

rrr_nightingale February 24 2011, 19:38:25 UTC

This is heart-breaking. The moment is very special, but you describe it so properly. I love the last line.

vail_kagami February 25 2011, 01:34:50 UTC

Thank you!