Comments | vail_kagami: SPN Fic: The World

vail_kagami

SPN Fic: The World

Nov 14, 2011 23:27

Title: The World
Fandom: Supernatural
Characters: Dean, Sam, Missouri
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: self-harm, insanity
Spoilers: Up to 7.02
Words: 8291
Summary: Missouri didn't expect to see them again. And for all her psychic powers, she could not have foreseen how much they changed.
Note: Witten for the following prompt left by anonymous at the current ohsam fic ( Read more... )

fandom: supernatural, medium: story, prompt fill

Comments 46

jennytork November 14 2011, 22:56:50 UTC

This is so very good! I'm going to put this in the permanent file!

2 nits to pick though -- at one point you have Sam ready to 'bold' instead of 'bolt'. And he tells Missouri that he didn't want to 'loose' the use of his hand rather than 'lose' it.

I really, really like this one and can't wait to read it over and over!

vail_kagami November 15 2011, 10:28:34 UTC

Thank you so much!

I fixed the mistakes, thanks for pointing them out.

lunasky3 November 14 2011, 23:33:24 UTC

“I have an IV stand in the car,” Dean told her that night. “In case he doesn’t eat for too long.”
It was probably the only reason why Sam was still alive.

And that's where I started bawling. *wibble* This is fantastic

vail_kagami November 15 2011, 10:29:26 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you like it!

verucasalt123 November 14 2011, 23:43:24 UTC

Beautiful and so touching. Nice to see Missouri's POV, I always wished she'd been incorporated into the show more.

vail_kagami November 15 2011, 10:32:04 UTC

So do I. Missouri was awesome.

I'm glad you liked this!

insertcode11 November 14 2011, 23:51:42 UTC

So beautiful and wrenching!

Thanks so much for sharing! ♥

vail_kagami November 15 2011, 10:33:16 UTC

Thanks for reading! :)

marziebarz November 15 2011, 00:14:09 UTC

This is beautiful. I love everything about Missouri, and I love getting a look at the boys through her because she is blunt and has no deceptions about whats happening in any given situation, at any given time. And I love the whole bit where Sam is sleeping, and her and Dean are talking, and she makes Dean say all this stuff out loud, because I think its something Dean needs to do. Just to kind of re-affirm it for himself. This hurt, sure, but it was kind of a good hurt? It's heartbreaking and wonderful and even if theres parts that make me want to cry, there were some stark insights into both boys that were simply amazing and I love it. It's fantastic.

vail_kagami November 15 2011, 10:36:54 UTC

I'm glad Missouri worked for you. Her PoV was more challenging than I thought it would be.

I love outsider PoV because it offers a new outlook on the boys. And Missouri seemed like a good choice - because she takes no bullshit even more than because of her psyching powers.

Thank you so much for you comment!