Comments | upriserseven: And I'll Hold You (So Close To My Skin)

upriserseven

And I'll Hold You (So Close To My Skin) - TGW Fanfic

Jul 13, 2011 23:45

So, this is not finished. I am making that very clear right now. I just felt that I'd been messing around with this too long, and if I post a part I'm kind of happy with, it's more motivation to get the rest of it finished to a satisfactory degree. I think I first promised this fic to sweetjamielee a couple of months ago, and let's be honest, there was a good ( Read more... )

the good wife, kalicia, fanfic

Comments 6

thecomet13 July 14 2011, 05:03:58 UTC

Oh my god. Please tell me that whatshisname gets the fuck out and leaves the two of them alone! They're just so beautiful *sighs*
I can't wait for the next chapter.
You've done a good job so far, so please please please keep going!! I need it *crazy fangirl mode on*

upriserseven July 14 2011, 23:22:07 UTC

Well, you'll just have to wait and find out ;)

thank you!

sweetjamielee July 14 2011, 15:50:47 UTC

I'm so glad you got around to posting, bb! That scene in the bar is like, one of my top 3 fave Kalicia moments and it kills me thinking of what could have come from it should Alicia never have gotten that call. I love this whole concept, whatshisname being used as an excuse, a catalyst for K/A to do what they REALLY want. UNF.

Also, Kalinda's wanting to "take a minute, just the two of them" does stuff to me. That guy must think he won the JACKPOT. Sir, you are unneeded.

As far as constructive stuff, I'd suggest splitting up the paragraphs with a space between, as it's harder to read when it's all smooshed together. Also, there's one spot where you slip into second person narrative.

But yeah, keep going! You've got me.:)

upriserseven July 14 2011, 23:21:30 UTC

I was determined that there would be a moment where it would just be them. And I was even more determined that Kalinda would initiate it. The bathroom scene is not finished, I promise!

threeguesses July 15 2011, 23:46:14 UTC

Mmm-hmm, this is pretty damn awesome. Oh Show, why couldn't they have had fun drunken threesomes before everything fell apart. Just ONE drunken threesome.

I LOVE the beginning: "Would you jump off a cliff if Kalinda told you to?" Yes, yes I would.

upriserseven July 16 2011, 22:34:12 UTC

if I think about it, I mean... take all my own preferences aside, all I can think is how much more it would've hurt Alicia.
So, I choose to believe that once they had this connection, Kalinda would've told her herself and everything would be okay by now.

I have this thing for Season 1 Alicia. She kind of hero-worshipped Kalinda and her fun, flirty, everything Alicia isn't-ness.

Glad you liked!