Comments | unsteady_ground: LOST - crawling towards the sun

angela_weber in unsteady_ground

LOST - crawling towards the sun

Dec 25, 2009 16:19

Title: crawling towards the sun
Pairing: Dan/Charlotte
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Not mine, never will be.
Warnings: AU.
Summary: Dan and Charlotte meet in an alternate reality, after the bomb goes off.
Author's Note: For the amazing valhalla37. Also for un_love_you, This cancels out the hurt.

( Dan is not a psychologist. )

rating: pg, fanfic: lost, character: charlotte lewis, fanfic, pairing: daniel/charlotte, character: daniel faraday, table: un_love_you

Comments 6

hintofawhisper December 26 2009, 21:27:35 UTC

Oooh. This was gorgeous. My heart hurts so much for Daniel here! I haven't read a Dan/Charlotte fic in forever, and this was a perfect fic of yours to read to get back into the ship. :D

He does not know why the sight of this woman makes him want to cry, why he is just barely able to restrain the tears threatening to run down his face hot and thick and painful. Her eyes are sharp and clear and the warm vital color in her cheeks is the loveliest shade of pink he's ever seen.

Oh, poor Dan. The fact that, of course, he doesn't really remember Charlotte, and why he is so emotional by seeing her, makes it devastating. I love the way Dan takes in her physical appearance; the detail is wonderful.

The way you describe Charlotte, her mannerisms-- it's spot-on. I can vividly see this in my mind, with her ordering her coffee, then her walking up to Dan, so confident-- that's SO her.

He stares for a moment too long and then nods, frantically, furiously; his head jerks almost spasmodically, as if he is a puppet on a string. His hands shake as ( ... )

angela_weber January 5 2010, 03:58:32 UTC

*cringes* SO very sorry for being so terribly late!! I don't have anywhere near enough time to adequately respond to a comment as phenomenal as this one is--but gah, suffice to say that you are amazing and I am so very happy that you enjoyed this! These two are so beguiling in such a quiet way, and it really means a lot that you thought they were in-character, especially Charlotte! And that you took the time to go through it nearly line-by-line--this is longer than the fic and really thrills me! :D :D :D Thank you sooooo much, and don't you dare be sad (or stay away, lol)! ;D ♥

valhalla37 December 28 2009, 22:00:35 UTC

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.

YOU ARE INCREDIBLE.

Seriously, between you and hitlikehammers and lenina20, I think I just need to give up on Dan/Charlotte right now, because you guys are the masters! ;D

I love how you interpreted the (super vague) prompt; this is such a great scenario for them, and every little moment, every quirk is so perfectly them. Like Charlotte, totally impatient and overconfident -- She orders her coffee black and asks the barista to recount her change, fingers tapping impatiently against the counter, her other hand in her jacket pocket -- and Dan, so almost fragile; He stares for a moment too long and then nods, frantically, furiously; his head jerks almost spasmodically, as if he is a puppet on a string. His hands shake as he hurriedly grabs at his papers, clearing a space for her. He knows that there is something about this woman--he knows, he knows, he knew, he will know--his head throbs with the incessant ache of questioning. It is an ache he's grown accustomed to. I can envision every second of this; I just kept thinking, "yes, of ( ... )

angela_weber January 4 2010, 00:14:42 UTC

First off, I'm so sorry for the delayed reply!! I am so glad that you liked this--and that you liked my Dan characterization seriously means the world! This could never ever measure up to your amazing fics, but thanks so much for the praise nonetheless. ;D This comment is insane--my ego is expanding like whoa! You are so very welcome--writing these two is really so much fun. Thank youuuuuu! :D :D *big hugs*

missy_useless January 13 2010, 11:56:00 UTC

WOAH.

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I know that every goddamn comment I write for one of your fics is basically the same but … God. Every one of your fics deserves the highest praise - and I really feel bad for not being able to give it properly because I have long run out of words to use - and this one is no exception. What an amazing fic. Hallelujah. Your Dan! Aww, I think your Dan just broke my heart a little bit. And your description of Charlotte is so vivid and real. Gotta love her, gotta love him, gotta love this fic. Awesome job, sweetie, as usual.

angela_weber January 15 2010, 01:50:46 UTC

Oh God, thank you so much, again!!! You rule this universe. ;) I am just SO endlessly happy that you liked this. Thank you so much. I have run out of words with which to thank you, I think! You are the BEST!