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FIC: Synergy (9/10)

Jul 15, 2009 05:02

Title: Synergy (9/10)
Rating: PG-13
Author: Ziggy Sternenstaub
Warnings: None
Words: approx. 2700 in this part

( The magnetic politician's cultured voice was saturated with charisma, thick with seduction and, even bloodless, Anakin was wildly tempted by the old man's promise. He knew it was possible...! )

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Comments 11

luminations July 15 2009, 15:33:50 UTC

Holy crap, Ziggy. I feel like whatever clumsy words I spew out here won't be enough!

So much ugliness in this chapter -- physical-description-wise. Quite fitting. Palpatine's rage against this thing that dares to defy him -- death! -- also quite fitting.

The dragon imagery meshes well with Stover's in RotS (though yours is better!)

I like the Nubian perception of black.

I can see why this chapter would be difficult to write, but for what it's worth I think it's brilliant. How does one who has not died describe the act, or art, of dying?

And I know it's wrong but I feel sorry for Palpatine >.>

PLEASE POST THE LAST CHAPTER VERY SOON :|

zigsternenstaub July 16 2009, 03:25:10 UTC

Back! :)

Holy crap, Ziggy. I feel like whatever clumsy words I spew out here won't be enough!

*blushes like the twin suns of Tatooine*

So much ugliness in this chapter -- physical-description-wise. Quite fitting. Palpatine's rage against this thing that dares to defy him -- death! -- also quite fitting.

I think it needed to be ugly so that the reader is confronted with just how terrible a choice Anakin has to make. And Palpatine...Palpatine is so helplessly angry when he's confronted by something that he doesn't understand. That rage is also, I think, part of the reason why he becomes so rigid as the years pass. Instead of being adaptive as he is in the prequels, he becomes increasingly rigid, his methods ossify--and of course he ultimately loses the control he tries so desperately to hold on to.

The dragon imagery meshes well with Stover's in RotS (though yours is better!)

Aww, thanks. I always liked Stover's metaphor, and I wanted to explore more about what it really meant.

I like the Nubian perception of black.I'm glad ( ... )

luminations July 16 2009, 15:13:34 UTC

Palpatine becomes rigid... hmmm, kinda like the Jedi were. (I know Palpatine and the Emperor are the same person but I tend to separate them in my head...I just like PT Palpatine sooooo much better!)

The fact that he's incapable of growth is one reason I only RP a crack version of him. :)

Thank YOU for your writing! I look forward to MOAR! *naaaag*

zigsternenstaub July 17 2009, 08:59:50 UTC

Yes, unfortunately he does come to be a violent mirror image of the passionliness Jedi. Even the self-indulgent decadence that is so oddly endearing in the prequels, the obvious love of art and beauty...these things too vanish. He becomes very sterile.

Your nags haunt my dreams! ;)

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acaciah July 16 2009, 13:07:08 UTC

I love this fic. As I've said before, usually I don't like Palpatine but you manage to humanize him and yet keep him in character. :D Post MOAR.

zigsternenstaub July 17 2009, 08:57:32 UTC

I'm glad that my Palpatine continues to please you. :) Thanks for the takin the time to comment! And the last part should be ready within the next week or two.

betareject August 10 2009, 03:09:58 UTC

zigsternenstaub August 11 2009, 01:04:59 UTC

Wow that was just potent and so incredibly, wonderfully dark. I loved how you portrayed the Dark Side as being the dragon. How helpless and yet blinded by his pride and arrogance Palpatine is in thinking he could control it.

What I wanted to explore here was the emptiness at the heart of his arrogance. That he has such a need to control that he'd spend his entire life creating this stupendous empire is really baffling. It bespeaks a tremendous strength of will, but also a tremendous fear.

Just seeing these two men having to face that fact they are mortal and in spite of their titles, their destinies they can't change it was portrayed so wonderfully.

They start out as archetypes, of course, and I just wanted to strip that away from them, render them helpless by exposing their absurd mortality. An interesting process!

betareject August 11 2009, 01:48:06 UTC

That's a good point there I never considered that before I mean how the arrogance in a way masked the empitness. How his desire to build this great kingdom speaks of his will and his fear. That certainly does place things in a different light. Really does reveal another side to Palpatine's vulnerability.

Well I'll definitely say one thing you certianly did a wonderful job of making these already complex characters even more three dimensional and so wonderfully human. It makes the entire universe of Star Wars so much more tangible and less shrouded in legend and mythos.