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Mar 27, 2003 20:40

i took a hard one to the mouth and as i went down i kept my head tilted up. the sky was kind of blue still and the stars were streaked as i started gaining speed. i cupped my left ear with my right hand and hit the ground. thwarting the apparition but causing some damage to my knuckles i gave him a good one in the stomach. it was a good clean punch ( Read more... )

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unlike March 28 2003, 20:38:02 UTC

no one's even going to read this.

unlike March 28 2003, 20:38:27 UTC

omg u r soooo gay!!!11

ex_goodbye269 March 29 2003, 18:19:32 UTC

i read this. whole damned thing, and there'd be a quiz on it later.

anonymous March 31 2003, 05:55:52 UTC

you can tell you've never been in a fight- you're fake all over.

unlike March 31 2003, 15:56:44 UTC

& what part of this story struck you as struggling for realism?

anonymous April 3 2003, 05:30:54 UTC

the 'fight' in the beginning makes me envision the wwf, where everyone doubles over with one punch and every amazing swing has been over-draumatized. If you want to know what a real fight sounds like you should get in one. And the blotter acid- my dog ate half a sheet of mine and amazingly she survived. No person could've survived eating half, let alone a whole sheet. Ever tried that shit? It's designed to fuck you up with just one shot. But I did like the description of the 'fortress' building that you placed yourself and gabrielle on- it sounds like someplace that actually happened. heh. not to be critical or anything. It was good.

unlike April 3 2003, 19:37:18 UTC

but that's the point man, it's all about television & bullshit & dreams-- the kind you have when you're asleep-- & i don't mean to be an asshole, i just think i should clarify... because there is a reason behind it all, "i ain't doin this shit for my health, y'know." i don't think i could go so far as to call it all fiction because it's based on pieces of something real but it's like a charicature because i'm really not very interesting then again neither are charicatures.. maybe i need to start using dragons...?

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the_sea_the_sea April 7 2003, 16:22:34 UTC

well i think it's good damnit.

unlike April 10 2003, 01:28:21 UTC

<3

thankya.

stopofficer April 24 2003, 08:06:32 UTC

hi.
your writing is aces.
whatevs to realism, you had a r.roulette pistol! who doesn't like their sidearms with a dash of vegas?
can't be beat.

unlike April 26 2003, 01:03:53 UTC

ROCK.

<3

unlike April 26 2003, 01:16:40 UTC

postcript i did quite a bit of searching (on the internet, so it's not really "searching" searching) to find out what the fuck those things are called or at least a specific brand & model or whatever so i would sound like i know something about something but... i don't know anything about anything. so i couldn't understand what in hell those gun sites were talking about. so it's a... russian roulette gun. heh.

stopofficer April 26 2003, 04:58:45 UTC

yeah, everything i learned 'bout guns i got from...law and order. (hey, d. wolf's a champ!) usually in conjunction with, "drop it, perp!"
so i think we's cool with russian roulette.

those gun sites are crazy, esp. the ones feat. busty women bound up in leathers. toting a machine gun! crikey.
rat a tat tat indeed.

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