PoT Fic: Recombinant Chapter 1

[universal_doll]

Aaand here's Chapter 1. I was going to post it on the weekend, but I'd completely forgotten about Labor Day and all the stuff I had to do. ^^;

Title: Recombinant
Author: Dolly (universal_dollRating: PG to PG-13

Comments

[koolsnowball]

^___^ I likes it.

... Kinda makes me wanna go back to work on some of the AUs I started--- *beats self* No talking about yourself when you're reviewing another story!

*cough* ANYWAY.

^_^ You don't have to explain your chapters! Er. Unless you do so because you want to and not because you feel like you need an excuse to have OCs otherwise fans will jump on you and... and beat you or something. >.>

Um. Anyway. I like this. ^^ I wanna know what'll happen next~
:D

also: This is AU. Making up mystical spiritual stuff is half the fun, right? :D
Unless. uh. You like going for accuracy. X3;;

I'll just stop now before I make a complete dork of myself. ^^:

[universal_doll]

Thanks for your comments! I really don't know why I explain everything, I guess its because this is my first tenipuri fic so I want to make sure I get things right (or as "right" as they can be, in an AU!), and because I tend to strongly dislike prominent OC's in stories and I didn't want to scare anyone off with mine. ^_~

I really appreciate your encouragement! ^__^

Recombinant Chapter 1

[andersenmom]

This is quite interesting. I cannot wait to see what happens! Great job in pulling the reader in.

Re: Recombinant Chapter 1

[universal_doll]

Thanks! I'm glad it caught your attention. :)

[pinkplasticpen]

I'm really intrigued and interested by this! I'm itching to click the "next chapter" button, but alas, there is no such thing... ^.^

Fantasy mystical AU things make my head reel and generally end up being ruthlessly nitpicked by my over-logical brain, but your writing style is superb! I read every word instead of skimming paragraphs like I usually do when I read heavy paragraphs in fic (a habit that I have GOT to break...I usually miss the most important things).

Ryoma is delightfuly snarky and the other regulars are solid as well. Yay for characterization!

Great chapter, love. I can't wait to read the next one!

[universal_doll]

Thank you for your kind words! ^_^

I tend to skim long paragraphs too, you're not alone! lol. And I'm happy that you like my writing style and characterization! I was really worried about the latter, since this is my first tenipuri fic. ^^;

[milenalupin]

This chapter is quite difficult for me. There are a lot of things which might scare me off, normally. I for one am happy about your short explanation that OCs are just for introduction right now and won't have major roles in the following parts. Because, honestly, that much time given to a female OC which is additionally labeled "sweet" and "pretty"... I'd run off terrified.

Thing I don't understand is why the tenshi uses a Latin spell, even though she seems to have lived in a Near East country. I don't expect you to be able to write Arab, but why use a different ancient language for the spell? Not like most readers (including myself) would know what it means anyway.

Other than that, your PoT characters are well-written, and I love your style of narration. That's what keeps me coming back for more. ^_^

[universal_doll]

Thanks for the thoughtful reviews! ^_^ I found the OC's to pose just the problem you noticed -- I needed them for the plot, but they really have very small roles *except* in the beginning, and that pretty female OC was just there as a tool to be killed off. ^^; To clarify, that OC saying the spell is not the tenshi, she is just some willing human pawn being used by the demons to do what you saw her do in this chapter. Prominent OC's scare me off of stories too! :P