Comments | unfinishedline: strip down, part one

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strip down, part one

Jun 17, 2007 18:56

Title: Strip Down
Author: missaliceblue
Pairing: Peter/Claire
Rating: NC-17 (canon incest)
Status: 1/2
Summary: Peter, Claire, champagne, tickle fights, and stripping. Need I say more?

Written for the wonderful eowyn_girl, as thanks for the smutty fic she wrote for my birthday. Love and kisses to my fabulous beta mutinousmuse.

( He should have pushed her away quickly, sat up, done something. He did let her go, eventually...but not fast enough. She hadn’t felt like a niece at that moment. )

fandom: heroes, fic: strip down, pairing: peter/claire

Comments 63

last_archangel June 18 2007, 01:23:12 UTC

Ha! I love that last bit of dialogue.

sinverguenza June 18 2007, 04:31:52 UTC

thanks!

eowyn_girl June 18 2007, 01:29:30 UTC

*shielding my eyes b/c I'm at work right now*

You already know how much I love the fic, must comment anyway! Love it, love it, love it. I'm a fan of slow burn, angsty 'we so cannot do this OMG you're my niece' Peter, only to have him give in to ultimate temptation later. Also there's that delicious irony of choir boy, new age sensitive man Peter being all wanton withe lustful thoughts of his niece, so very, very naughty.

And love that Claire isn't overly forward, she's just the right amount of desperately wanting him and shy and coltish. She is very young still and sleeping with your uncle isn't really a light decision to make.

I'm going to read it again tonight (god I hope no one reads my computer screen right now! Hee)

Great work! And thank you!! ;-)

sinverguenza June 18 2007, 04:33:58 UTC

haha, well nothing too diff from the last time you read it. i hope though that it did you justice :) coltish, thats a great way to describe claire!

its not exactly completely realistic (i see peter struggling way more with the decision to bone his niece, LOL), but sometimes smut for the sake of smut is fun.

in either case, this is the first time i wrote smut, and it scared me terribly to do it, but i feel like i've stretched my wings as a fanfic writer, so yay!

asweetdownfall June 18 2007, 02:07:55 UTC

Damn girl. That was hot.

sinverguenza June 18 2007, 04:34:23 UTC

haw. glad you thought so.

eurogabby June 18 2007, 02:44:16 UTC

OMG YEY! I have been waiting for this since you first announced you were making one. And all I can say is : AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!11111one I love the dialouge, nothing poetic and sappy. It would be pretty cliche for him to profess his love or something.

"Seriously, finally."
"Yeah."

I loved that, totally awesome. I'm meming this!

sinverguenza June 18 2007, 04:36:00 UTC

i am so glad it didnt disappoint you! and that you loved it :) thanks for reviewing!

iko June 18 2007, 02:55:55 UTC

Wow, I love long teasing. That was great, thank you! *runs off to take a cold shower*

sinverguenza June 18 2007, 04:36:28 UTC

i love teasing too :) glad that you liked it, thank you for saying so.