Fic, Fujicest, "1001 Tokyo Lights", for 30_lemons

[unexpectedtimes]

You know, the dreadful thing about this fic was that it was inspired by a Ronan Keating song. Oh God. XD; Obviously I tweaked it for my own purposes, but ehh, I am very aware that I could have made this into a songlemon, and that would have been Bad. Oh man

Comments

[lion]

I...you...this...the pain in this made me cry. Beautiful, atmospheric, deep, realistic. The best Fujicest fic I've seen you do, full stop. Gorgeous. You are a genius with little gem-sentences; little tiny phrases that twist my heart and make my stomach go all light, and this was no exception. Just...wow. :)

[vanillafire]

You are a genius with little gem-sentences; little tiny phrases

^___^ Any examples of these...? I'm just curious to see whether the same things that affected me affected you, or whether there were a lot of accidental things in there. XD

I'm glad you found it like you did - it was the atmosphere and overall feel that I was going for, so I'm pleased that it worked! It hurt to write, though. Who did you feel more sorry for, Shuusuke or Yuuta? Again, I'm curious, because I think everyone but me is feeling more sorry for Yuuta...

[vanillafire]

It's interesting you mention Gravitation, on two counts, actually. One, in my head, Shuusuke's apartment is modelled on a combination of Eiri's apartment and Frasier Crane's (from Frasier). (XD XD XD) Secondly, while I was replying to Cat below just now, I was nearly going to parallel how the days after this fic would go with Gravi, because Yuuta's gonna have to be like Shuuichi and convince Shuusuke that he does know what he's doing and what he wants, all the time trying to figure out what it is that's making him distant. It's not really the same at all, of course, but the basic model is there... :O

*uses the one Gravi icon she has left*

[vanillafire]

This comment made my night; thank you. ♥ There were some passages of Shuusuke's that hurt me to write, because of what it meant for both him and Yuuta, and just... the overall aura of Yuuta hurt as well, because he's still so naive and vulnerable, and Shuusuke's trying to protect him from his own brother but fails and I don't know whether it would have been more sad for Yuuta just to have left or not...! ;__;

This was the easiest fic I've ever written, so I think that's telling me something, especially as the general consensus seems to be that this is the best fic I've written to date. *^^*

[vanillafire]

It's an amazing feeling to watch something like this come from someone else, because I, for one, know how amazing it feels when the writing just... happens, and you can't stop it. /writing dork

I was wondering where it all came from, until just now, when I suddenly remembered that I've been in the exact same situation (apart from, er, the incest and the length of time...!) some years before, from Yuuta's position, and wow, it's weird to see it all laid out here like this! My RL Shuusuke was mean to me to keep me away, and didn't believe that he was what I needed, but I just didn't quit! (Except eventually I had to...)

I think you took the hard option in writing it this way, and it was resolved beautifully.

It was the only way I could have done it, I think, because I don't think Yuuta, with a love so forbidden and strong, could ever deal with having to push it back down and forget about it and leave it unresolved. If you do that, you turn into Shuusuke here... ;-; (Also, because I was writing this for 30_lemons, it wouldn't have worked if

[sailorstarsun]

.;o;

That was beautiful....

[vanillafire]

Thank you - I'm glad you enjoyed it! ^__^ Some parts of it really hurt to write...!

[airairo]

Yuuta really wanted to snatch Shuusuke's mug from him and have a swig of whatever it was he was drinking, because a dose of crazy was the only thing he thought could stop him from feeling this cocktail of anger and confusion and humiliation. <-- that's gorgeous.

I'm very ADD and it'll usually take me hours to read a fic because I'll keep getting distracted but I just read this one start to finish without taking my eyes off the screen! This piece flowed very well. I really enjoy your Fujicest. I hope you'll keep writing it even when these 30 are done!

[vanillafire]

<-- that's gorgeous.

Wow, everyone tonight's picking out the bits that I loved most myself! ^__^

it'll usually take me hours to read a fic because I'll keep getting distracted

I'm like that with fics myself too, a lot of the time; I usually can't concentrate right to the end, so I have to refresh my friends page a couple of times every so often to break it up, unless it's very, very good. Oh dear. XD I'm really pleased that you could read this all the way through, though! I find that that's easier to do with fics that have a lot of dialogue (which happens to be what I love writing above all else...).

I hope you'll keep writing it even when these 30 are done!

Nothing short of divorce from Fuji would ever stop me writing these two. I love them too much! ♥

[alsie]

I...wow..

[vanillafire]

:D Glad you enjoyed it! ^____^

*loves* ♥

[alsie]

It was awesome!! :O ♥~~~

[Would you be up for continuing our game sometime? I also have so many ideas for other things we could do with them. X3;]

[vanillafire]

[Oh, absolutely! Sorry I've been SO scatty with it! Please keep poking me about it like this! I'm busy from now until Sunday, but after that, if I don't make an appearance with my next part, poke me again! :O :O I can't wait to see what your ideas will turn into...! >:D]