Joe the Clam

[underless]

Suckiest. Entry. EVER! :D
Nah, seriously, it is pretty bad, since I rushed it yet again. I think I take the prompts a little too literally, and don't leave myself enough freedom to play around with it. Ah, well. Enjoy.

Comments

[fawatson]

Not even leaps that wasn’t very frolicking at all.

This is charming.

[underless]

Thanks! :)

[a_selfish_meme]

Awesome job! You managed to get across the full meaning of "happy as a clam" with an actual clam! Also 'The Great Laughing Horror'<---awesome!!!

[underless]

Thank you! :)

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[silverflight8]

Hi, I'm one of your editors for this week (I'm late, sorry!)
or ever crawl over to Joe the Clam
-I think you meant "even" instead of "ever". And since there's two Joe the Clams, consider using 'the other' or the equivalent so you can tell which one he's talking about.

afore-mentioned
-I think this doesn't need the hyphen.

After a short contemplation,
-Purely stylistically and opinion based, but you've used "after a short contemplation" twice close to each other. Consider revising?

-I can see that azuire already told you about the capitalization after dialogue, but to as a general rule, if the part after your dialogue in quotations refers to the dialogue (he said, she said, etc) you use a comma/question mark inside the quotation marks and keep the lower case for for the "he said" part.

I really liked this piece: I kept smiling (especially at some of the comments that Joe has on his life xD). Very funny in a wry sort of way; the name 'Joe' was well suited. :) Lots of fun to read.

[volinash]

Great post! I want to see a follow up to this topic