Comments | undeniable_fate: Chapter Four-ness

undeniable_fate

Chapter Four-ness

Oct 04, 2006 16:22

(Azelma, please forgive me if I am trampling on the sacred teachings of basic swimming. I was totally winging this description.)

Sink or Swim

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“No.”

“But Lian, you promised.”

“Yeah, an’ I kept it!”

“Gettin’ your feet wet doesn’t count as swimming.”

“Can’t we do somethin’ else?”

“You swore that you’d let me teach you how ta swim as ( Read more... )

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daybreak25 October 4 2006, 23:39:46 UTC

Hi. I'm looking Sushi. If you've seen her, please tell her there is an impostor lurking around her journal and calling her awesome pieces sucky. Because as far as I could tell, this still beats mine out of the water. I'm EDITTTTTINNNNNNG.

Somehow, the dialouge reminded me heavily of Charlie Brown. It was soooo cute. And the ending kicked total ass, and judging that this is the last kiddie-entry, this was the perfect way to offically end the child-love.

I FIND NOTHING WRONG WITH THIS. AT ALL. AT ALL.

Give me a moment and I'll post my sorry entry of a chapter/drabble.

daybreak25 October 4 2006, 23:40:04 UTC

I meant looking FOR Sushi, actually. :)

daybreak25 October 5 2006, 22:52:53 UTC

I HAVE RETURNED.

So because you really wanted help, I decided that I must find something to help you with. So I did. Kinda. Almost.

Suddenly, everything went black.

I know Mar'i explained this, but how exactly did Lian pass out. Or what I'm really asking is, how did Lian swallow all that water? Did she slip (God forbid.)?

And I'm totally trying, Sushi, I am -- but hon, it's damn hard trying to edit your work. Cause it's better than you think it is. DON'T MAKE ME DO THIS!

I'm kinda confused as to why Mar'i and Lian wanted/had planned to carve themselves into that rock. Was it because they wanted to leave their mark on Titans Tower or was it for future generations, or such? It'd be awesome to know, and take a very, very, very small load off my mind. Cause it's not a big, huge disaster, but it'd be great to know. :)