Comments | ultracosmicrays: Going for a Ride

ultracosmicrays

Going for a Ride

Aug 21, 2007 23:46

Comments 10

slidellra August 22 2007, 00:14:53 UTC

This is amazing. You are amazing. Gripping, nice flow, rich detail, great relationship between the Rays, simmering hotness...It's got it all. YAY!

ultracosmicrays August 22 2007, 10:23:56 UTC

Thank you! It was your all powerful kicking that got the last section written so Yay! for you. I have bruises up my Cosmic!Rays this morning. It hurts to sit down. :)

thehousekeeper August 22 2007, 00:32:52 UTC

I had to. I should be practicing, but I had to read, and I'm so glad I did. But! Cliffhanger. Not. Cool.

I adore this, and I loved the last section SO much. Aw, Vecchio. *snuggles him*

ultracosmicrays August 22 2007, 10:27:01 UTC

Oh noes! I made you not practise. What will R think?! /is provocative.

I am so glad you loved the last section - it had me flummoxed for a while there.

And cliffhangers ARE cool, they mean you'll have to skip a bit of practice later to see what happened next. \o/ I am in ur laptop, screwing with ur priorities!

lamentables August 22 2007, 06:01:29 UTC

I particularly like the port description. And how you've made the descriptive passages fit the style of the banter.

ultracosmicrays August 22 2007, 10:34:15 UTC

Oh, thank you! I'm so glad. I was really unsure about whether I could pull the description off. I think I spend too much time worrying about how well other people do it instead of just getting on and doing the best I can.

lamentables August 22 2007, 10:41:06 UTC

I thought you'd set yourself a really tough challenge there. The style of this thing is not lyrical because you've captured the very different music of the Ray-style banter and I think that's very hard to redirect towards description. It would have been easy to end up with two different voices, I think.

ultracosmicrays August 22 2007, 11:50:43 UTC

Yes! Absolutely. And that's why I was in a major panic over it. I desperately wanted to give the reader some visuals, a real sense of what the Rays were seeing, feeling, smelling etc. but without it seeming like a completely different story. I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you think it all holds together. *beams*

snoopypez November 24 2007, 10:12:18 UTC

I heart the banter in the first scene. And that City-Ride sounds COOL. Heh. Cute family, too. :)

Kowalski got it. Ray was grateful. He showed it the only way he knew how.

"Asshole."

AWWWWWW. :D

ultracosmicrays November 24 2007, 12:10:45 UTC

Thank you! And wouldn't it be cool to have City-Rides for public transport. I don't think I'd ever get back in my car again.