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Intercomm fic: Never Lie To A Dying Man

Feb 02, 2011 00:23

Title: Never lie to a dying man
Author: Channiegurl
Word count: 616
Raiting: R
Characters/Pairings: Djaq/Will
Warnings: AU, Character death.
Summary: Those six words had been her constant mantra in the battle feilds. But now, for the first time, Djaq found herself battling against them.

( Never Lie to a Dying Man )

character: djaq, intercomm 2011, cat: ficlet, character: will, pairing: djaq/will, cat: angst

Comments 9

hippie_girl_31 February 2 2011, 00:55:47 UTC

Um...you...you killed Will! *sniffle*

Oh, but what a beautiful way to do it. I really love Djaq's voice here. It's such a perfect mix of strong and sensitive. How heartbreakingly sad for her to be unable to do anything to save Will's life. But how beautiful for her to give in to his last request, throw everything she's learned and lived by aside, and say just what he needed to hear. Lovely! Lovely and sad...but still lovely. :)

channiegurl February 2 2011, 14:31:55 UTC

I know, I'm a terrible person *hangs head*. I was meant to be writing some cute Djaq fluff for a friend, but this came out instead.
I'm plased you liked it, even through the sadness.

jagnikjen February 2 2011, 15:48:36 UTC

Oh, wow. You really captured the moment well. And you presented both Djaq and Will perfectly.

One tiny nitpick--when Djaq tells Will it's going to be "ok"...that term didn't exist in the Middle Ages.

channiegurl February 2 2011, 16:08:08 UTC

Thanks, I'm glad you like how i wrote the paiirng, it's my first time.
I hope you'll excuse me if i don't correct one tiny inacuracey in a fic that's based on a TV show where maid marian wears trousers. Historical acuracey is hardly whatthis fandom is about.

jagnikjen February 2 2011, 16:14:21 UTC

True enough. No worries! Just thought I'd mention it. :)

secretchord February 4 2011, 01:00:39 UTC

Mm, very sad. You described Will's last moments so well. I really like, too, that you have him being the one giving comfort when it should be the other way around, and I can totally identify with Djaq here - wanting to be the strong one, and finding that grief is far stronger. Well done.

mai_shiranui February 4 2011, 16:39:47 UTC

So sad yet so incredibly good. That last sentence just breaks your heart.

I cannot believe that you killed Will though. How could you?

channiegurl February 4 2011, 20:51:36 UTC

I didn't kill him, somebody else in the story did >.>

Ok look, i'm really really sorrry! I feel awful for killing him...

ladykate63 February 18 2011, 18:24:29 UTC

Oh wow, that was heartbreaking, and so believable. Poor Will and Djaq. :-/