fanfic: 6 Real Madrid Drabbles
I wrote six Real Madrid drabbles for footie_100's prompt "Aftermath", and thought I'd repost them here to have them all in one place.
Feedback of any kind is welcome and encouraged. I'm not too good at drabbles and want to improve. :)
Disclaimer: I'm a lying bastard and made this all up. I don't claim to know any of the players I write about, they're most ( Read more... )
Feedback of any kind is welcome and encouraged. I'm not too good at drabbles and want to improve. :)
Disclaimer: I'm a lying bastard and made this all up. I don't claim to know any of the players I write about, they're most ( Read more... )
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The next morning a sharp cry echoed through the whole building. Then, Fernando entered the dining room, hair woven into about a million neatly tied braids.
*claps* That was so brilliant and funny it brings a tear to my eye.
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wispykitty gave me the plotbunny for the last one, and I just couldn't resist. The mental image! XDDDD
Glad you liked!
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And Fernando/Gonzalo is a huge weakness of me... The whole concept of enemies turning into lovers is fascinating. :)
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Awww...the Roberto Carlos one was so beautiful and sad.
The Sergio/David made me feel soooooo bad for David I got a lump in my throat. Because I know Sergio will be alright but David won't be.
The Miguel/Sergio one left me breathless because of all the intoxicating implications of what could/will transpire between those two. *drools*
Ooooohhhh! "Breathless" is hot. Really hot. You made me feel what Gonzalo was feeling! LOL.
"Jealousy" has an intriguingly complicated plot going on there. I love the angsty quality. You have a great talent describing feelings.
"Insomnia". Wow. You expertly segued into humour and did it so well. I love this. I hope you continue the series because I want to know how everything progresses among all these boys. Yum-yum. LOL.
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Because I know Sergio will be alright but David won't be.
*sniffles* Yeah, exactly. I felt so bad when I wrote this. And I'm still living in denial about David actually leaving. :(
Sergio so got into Miguel's pants that night. And lhuneldaiel and I believe that Gonzalo got into his pants, too, after that seductive dance Miguel did in front of him. ;)
I'm rather satisfied with the way "Breathless" turned out, even though I'm still surprised I wrote that. Suddenly, the muses were all porny in my head and forced me to write smut. They're so uncontrollable.
"Jealousy" was actually prompted by wispykitty, just like "Insomnia", and I just had to write them. They explore the relationship between them and I love that ( ... )
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And Breathless is so hot! Absolutely breathtaking. I don't even know these people and it's still hot.
the way he purrs like a cat, moans like a prostitute, or groans so gutturally that Gonzalo can feel the vibrations rush into him from the very bottom of Fernando's soul
*dead*
Seriously, those were brilliant. I wonder why on earth you think you're not good at drabbles, because it's not true!
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Sergio Ramos must be shown to the world because he is teh sex. *nodnod* ;)
And Breathless is so hot! Absolutely breathtaking. I don't even know these people and it's still hot.
Well, Fernando Gago is hot. lhuneldaiel wrote in her feedback that "Breathless" could almost make people think I had sex with Gago, myself. Which, to be frank, killed me. Guh. I don't even want to imagine how that would be, because I'm afraid I wouldn't survive the thought ( ... )
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The Last Time
Heartbreaking. I mean the words really pulled the heart strings.
Final
Another sad drabble. I mean the perfect use of words to show emotion and turmoil.
The defender pulls back and gasps as he sees the world implode in David's eyes.
This sentence just killed me. I mean Holy God
Tonight
Teasing and sweet, I like the use of imagery and words. Both beautiful and subtle.
Breathless
If you write p0rn this good in 100 words, God knows how hot it would be with more. Just stunning ♥
Jealousy
I love how you worded this drabble. Not the usual idea of jealousy. Original!
Insomnia
lmao, funny and cute. I love to see his hair braided *g*
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Ok. So thus ends my speel LOL. ♥ Really good drabbles. Even though I only know Sergio, your words make it easy to forget the pairing and just about the feelings and emotions. ♥
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I was so heartbroken when Roberto Carlos left Real Madrid - not when his transfer was announced, mind you, but when I saw pics of him in the Fenerbahce kit. That was the moment I realised he's actually gone. *sigh* I already miss the pics of him goofing with the team during training. He's always brought such a good atmosphere to the squad.
Since there hasn't been any visual evidence on David's transfer, I'm still living in denial and expecting to be pulled back into the real world quite soon, when Real start training. I'm still wondering if David will have as intimate affiliations with his new teammates as he had in Madrid, so I just had to write that drabble.
I wrote another porny drabble here, and even though the disclaimer says it's Beckham/Ramos, no names are mentioned in the actual narrative, so you might enjoy that one as well. (But I'll stop self-pimping now, I'm horrible ( ... )
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Yeah I like Roberto Carlos too, he seems like a fun guy. Aw! I know, I'm stressing over if Alan Smith will get sold, and if he does I might just start crying.
Oh! David, I was upset he signed to LA Galaxy. It's just so wrong, but when we see him in that strip...ick.
Aw! He must have looked cute as hell, especially if they were really tight braids.
LOL. I shall read that drabble too. Good pimp me some good stories ♥
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