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[littleloonlost]

I had hoped to manage to tidy this up before I posted, but since six months is quite late enough...

From the Toby round, for wistful_memory.

Title: The Empty Space
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: the whole series
Characters: Toby(/CJ), Huck and Molly, Andrea

Comments

[severuslovesme]

This is absolutely gorgeous! I love your characterization of the twins, and your Toby is lovely.

[littleloonlost]

Thank you, that's lovely to hear. Wasn't sure if anyone would dig their way through this. *g*

[soaked_in_stars]

I KNEW I should have commented when I finished reading this last night (which, fabulous timing, because oh my god, was I bored at work), but I was really impressed with this on several levels. Your writing is, as always, such a graceful narrative, doesn't lose the story in the turn of phrase. And also, it's funny because this fanon is about 180 degrees from mine, which often makes it hard for me to really get into a story, but your characterization was so spot on that I was totally there the whole time. My heart just absolutely breaks for Andy throughout this, and I kept wanting moremoremore of this Andy. Fantastic.

[littleloonlost]

I could kiss you for reading and tolerating our differing perspectives and saying Nice Things. One of the (many, many, many) many things that tripped me up in the putting this together (the bulk of it has been written since February, but the rest - aargh) was Andy's role. I certainly didn't want it to sound like I was blaming her for Molly's issues, and I also didn't want to just have her crying all the time - but then I never have really known what to do with her. Thank you, love.

[raedbard]

Do I always say 'wow'? I think I often do. But damn, you deserve it.

I feel a bit like Clr must, I think, because this is again fairly removed from my version of the twins but good god, it so doesn't matter at all. (And we said once that that was the best thing about the twins - that they're a blank slate for everyone. Still stands.)

Your prose is stylish and elegant and always sucks me in. And your Toby is still one of the very very best. And I am *ridiculously* hard to please. ;) And always ALWAYS you make me think of something I hadn't thought of or considered before. And that's really precious. (And worth the wait. :))

So basically, this is beautiful. And I love your Molly. I love her.

Favourite line, which gave me shivers and ideas: It's one of the stories of him, half-full of fiction but only half-empty of fact.

Eeee. Thank you for writing, sweet. It's always *wonderful*.

[littleloonlost]

Not always, but I like it when you do. ;)

*nods* That really is the best thing about the twins. Next time, if there is one, I might write very different versions. These ones are similar to those I've used before because I still had more to say about them, but I don't have a fixed image of them in my mind at all.

Seriously, I very much appreciate your words. I'm thrilled that you like it, and it's gracious of you to comment, considering how I've messed the comm around.

[lifeasanamazon]

I can't believe I nearly missed this. Can't believe it.

You are so... wise. There's so much in here that I love. Almost every word. I copied this at first,

The kids love him, apart from the ones who hate him. He lacks the patience to be a good teacher, to deconstruct his wisdom with small words and visual aids. He is a merciless grader. His classes end whenever he gives up hope of making them get it, which sometimes takes ten minutes and sometimes takes twice as long as the class is scheduled. They don't know that they don't know anything. He can teach them to write, but not to think, and he despises the act of tidying up their mindlessness. He cracks them up. Some of them, monstrous in their want of subtlety, want to fuck him.

It keeps him human. He remains ungrateful.because it struck me as one of the most perfect things about Toby I'd ever read, but then you equalled it within a couple of sentences

[littleloonlost]

I can't tell you how much it means that you still care. Thank you for reading and reacting... and everything. (And any little wisdom I do have, comes from copying people like you).

[docfraiser8]

My god. I think that it can't get better but then it does.

I would quote the same section as Angie as one of my favorites but...then the whole thing is glorious.

You don't even pull for the words, do you? You know exactly which ones to use and where to put them. I aim for that...

[littleloonlost]

Oh, trust me, getting some of these words was like trying to pull off a limb. *g* But I'm glad it wasn't too obvious.

Thank you so much for reading, love. Hope you're having a better day today.