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Other Bella

Jan 11, 2012 23:12

Title: Other Bella
Author: nintendogal55
Fandom: Twilight
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 6,244
Inspiration: The Twilight series in general
Warnings: Mild swearing, inexplicable time travel, masturbation reference and self-indulgent references.
Summary: When Bella Swan starts at Forks High School and is intrigued by Edward Cullen, she gets a surprising visit from her future ( Read more... )

genre: general, rating: pg-13, spitefic type: how it should have gone, spitefic type: canon twisting, character: edward cullen, book: twilight series general, character: bella swan, character: charlie swan, length: 5000-10000

Comments 8

morri_delrae January 12 2012, 23:03:44 UTC

Wow, this story was something right up my alley! For some reason, I really, really like the idea of future!Bella becoming disillusioned with vampiric life, and coming back to warn her younger self. I had tons of fun reading present!Bella's incredulous reactions to the absurd future her canon designed for her, and... while future!Bella might be hard on herself, in this story they both show more common sense than canon!Bella ever did.

I think it wouldn't hurt to include just a bit more explanation of what exactly made her change her mind about vampirism (maybe she missed the dreams? Or the sun? Maybe she got tired of being supervised and controlled all the time? Maybe she longed for a career which the forever-eighteen appearance prevented her from having?). Either way, it was a real treat.

nintendogal55 January 12 2012, 23:42:39 UTC

Thanks very much! :D I'm glad you enjoyed it, and could see exactly what I was intending!

You know, I was thinking of that, too. I might go ahead and write a prequel that would take place during which future!Bella would have a wake-up call and realize what mistakes she's made. So that's a good idea! I think it would be a great thing to shed light on that.

Thanks again! :)

xxburningsoulxx January 13 2012, 01:15:10 UTC

Awesome job. It's nice to see Bella finally get her grip together, and give some common sense to her past self.

nintendogal55 January 13 2012, 18:52:59 UTC

Thanks a lot! I thought it'd be an interesting take on spitefics. :3

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nintendogal55 January 13 2012, 18:54:27 UTC

Thank you so much! >w< That was exactly my intention! Plus I even wanted to develop her character a bit and add as to why she's a little bit awkward around people, since really...Meyer knows nothing about depth.

You know, maybe a sequel is in order! ;) That's true, it would be neat to expand on it and see how Edward goes about all this.

morri_delrae January 14 2012, 13:42:21 UTC

You know, maybe a sequel is in order! ;) That's true, it would be neat to expand on it and see how Edward goes about all this.

Oh, yes, please do. *rubs hands* *pops some popcorn*

nintendogal55 January 14 2012, 19:31:04 UTC

XD Well then! The people have spoken! :D I'll do it, then! A sequel and a prequel coming up!

ext_2456708 July 19 2014, 22:11:35 UTC

She is so normal I even felt her out of character :D