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His Real Face

Jan 31, 2011 20:06

Title: His Real Face

Author: amadris

Fandom(s): Twilight (1st book)

Rating: PG-13

Word Count: 947

Inspiration: Chapter 12 and 13 when the Great Sparkle is revealed.

Warnings: Some violence

Summary: Bella sees Edward’s real face for the very first time. She doesn’t like what she sees.

( Under a mask, there was another Edward )

rating: pg-13, length: 500-1000, book: twilight, spitefic type: canon twisting, genre: drama, spitefic type: rewrite, character: bella swan, warning: violence

Comments 11

lurkythespork January 31 2011, 19:06:42 UTC

This was nothing short of beautiful. Even if it had a gory discretion shot, it was really, really awesome!

What's ironic is that canon has Bella and Edward's relationship as being "like a fairy tale"--but this was much more like traditional fairy tales. Color me impressed!

amadris January 31 2011, 19:19:48 UTC

Thanks! I love Beauty and the Beast, but for once I wanted to do something different with it. Plus I wanted to have some punishment on Bella for her shallow ways - having her blinded was pretty much perfect way to go.

I think she later on started to realize what had really happened and tried to get a hold of Edward, but he was of course long gone by then.

emmram January 31 2011, 20:36:54 UTC

This was fantastic!

It reminds me of the first time I saw Twilight - I saw the movie long before I'd even heard of the books - and the moment Edward makes a big production out of stepping into the sunlight, I had this scenario in mind. That he was actually some kind of hideous monster, with the pretty-boy image only a facade.

Imagine my surprise when I found out what it really was ("what the hell, he's just got glittery sweat!")

The descriptions in this were very nice, characterisation spot-on, and the concept very intriguing. Well done!

amadris February 1 2011, 09:42:35 UTC

That's exactly how I felt when I first read the book. I was expecting him to become this monstrous creature. I just could not believe it when he sparkled, nor did I buy Bella's reaction to it. Seriously - she is supposed to be this sarcastic, grown up too soon girl, and she is all awed by sparkles!

Thanks for reading!

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amadris April 1 2011, 14:48:30 UTC

Here Meyer had a chance to do something new and special, but what did she end up with? Sparkling vampires. And she could not even conduct that very well but made this supposedly world-weary, sarcastic old soul chick go all ecstatic at the sight of a _sparkling guy_. Everyone in these series has the most idiotic reactions to the sparkling.

kseenaa January 31 2011, 21:33:04 UTC

Tragic. And oh so very beautiful...

pastiche_cain February 1 2011, 01:33:47 UTC

That was incredibly beautiful. Shame on Bella, the shallow twat.

hyperactivator February 1 2011, 01:46:40 UTC

Wonderfull.