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kaiwynn in twilight_t00bs

five times something almost happened and one time it did

Jan 22, 2008 20:01

title: five times something almost happened and one time it did
pairing: Carlisle/Bella
rating: Teen
a/n: Written for the Carlisle/Bella ficathon. Also, it's AU because in this fic, Bella refuses Edward's offer of marriage.
( sharp shards of her innocence )

au, new moon au, angst, kaiwynn, carlisle/bella, one-shot

Comments 22

jacyevans January 23 2008, 02:16:56 UTC

Day-um, girl.

This was gorgeous. The entire thing had this lyrical quality to it, and the fact that she says no to Edward, that she's still changed and is first embarrassed but then gives in to her attraction to Carlisle is ironic.

And this:
members of her new family waiting for the moment when she slips up and gives in to those tempting voices (it's just an inch below the skin, no obstacle for you, tear through like tissue paper)
sent chills down my spine.

Beautiful <333

kaiwynn January 23 2008, 02:25:04 UTC

Thank you so much! ♥ I'd always expected her to say no to Edward. It made more sense to me. (Or maybe that was just wishful thinking?)

jacyevans January 23 2008, 02:50:16 UTC

Haha - I didn't quite expect her to say no to Edward. Because that's just not Bella. Canon!Bella has practically no backbone, and that's always bothered me about her.

xalcottx January 23 2008, 04:16:02 UTC

Since you posted this, I need to comment with a question. Do you think that she will show a bit more backbone in BD? As I have re-read them all, I think she has come a long way through the past three books in showing her gumption and I think (and hope) that BD will continue the trend.

Your comment just made me want to ask your opinion on the same.

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starsfadein January 23 2008, 03:00:27 UTC

This was wonderfully done, thanks for the good read.

kaiwynn January 23 2008, 03:46:30 UTC

Thank you <3

natatree January 23 2008, 03:25:25 UTC

Amazing!!

kaiwynn January 23 2008, 03:46:53 UTC

thanks!!

xalcottx January 23 2008, 04:18:50 UTC

Tuesdays are always the best days!

This was perfect on so many levels. As much as we know about Carlisle, we know very little overall (so many years to cover)... I would think there would have to be such strong feelings towards him in that type of family enviornment. This explored it really well!

kaiwynn January 23 2008, 04:31:04 UTC

I love Tuesdays ^_^

Thank you :) I feel the same way -- Carlisle's such a daunting character.

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kaiwynn January 24 2008, 01:13:45 UTC

Really? Wow. Not intentional. But it's cool that you can interpret it that way!